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'jogging with my dad every weekend'- person who has had a significant influence on me



leah0604 1 / 1  
Nov 24, 2011   #1
"Three more miles, we are almost half a way!" my dad cheerily shouted. In my childhood, the hardest and the most memorable events were jogging with my dad every weekend. Since I was seven my dad used to bring my sister, brother and me to Han River Park every Sunday and made us jog with him. When we run together, he always kept pace with us and encouraged with cheerful words. We usually jogged three to six miles, and obviously my sister, brother, and I didn't appreciate running that much. However, since we were too young to neither question my dad's motives nor refute his will, running-every-weekend had been typical family events for us until l came to America for studying.

When I came to America, I was bit joyful since I was finally released from the obligation of running-every-weekend. However, the greater hardship and difficulties were waiting for me. Because of language barrier and cultural differences, my GPA was not satisfying at all, and I cannot even address to native-classmates because of lacking confidence in my English. I could not even order food by myself at restaurants. It seemed like I had to start everything again. I surely needed some encouragement and courage.

It was a sophomore year when I started to jog by myself daily. I was surprised to myself because I used to be tired of "running". Running back over the past, I finally can understand my dad's motive to run. He always jogs long miles daily, even though he is not a marathoner. As a CEO who owns small venture business, my dad always faces barriers, difficulties, and failures. To improve his business in the middle of the tough times, he needs self-discipline to make him stalwart and steady. After understanding dad's motivation, I viewed "running" more than just physical activity. I started to nearly push myself to jog every day as self-challenging even though the weather is harsh or I don't feel like run. It is exhausting when I am running, but after accomplishing long run, I feel confident and refreshing. During the sophomore and junior year, I even joined in cross-country team. Although I might not be the most valuable player at the meeting I did my best at every single meeting for the team, and awarded for the most-improving-records among the team players. Furthermore, I enthusiastically encouraged team members like my dad did to me and every practices and meetings offer me great opportunities to make native friends and to improve my English.

When I jog, I remind to myself that I have great potential to overcome any hardship because I have accomplished a long run without any exterior force. I overcame language and cultural barriers with tenacity and confidence that I earned from daily jogging. My dad taught me a significance of self- challenge. A man who overcomes minor difficulty can also overcome major difficulty.

jaydennn 1 / 3  
Nov 25, 2011   #2
Not being rude but your essay is bland. I only see a jogger and not much else. All the other stuff you put in is all fluff, it's not worth a moment of attention. You even sound like a whiny kid at the second paragraph. What I suggest you should do to improve this essay is that you can try to exhibit the deep connection with your dad that develops during your jogging sessions with him and how it shapes you into an optimistic person. Try to descriptively show the readers what you and your dad did together and how you miss your time jogging with him. Don't pull a crude conclusion and write bloated general theories about people at the end like that, show some personal observation.
OP leah0604 1 / 1  
Nov 25, 2011   #3
Thank U very much !!!!


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