Hi guys, I really need help on my college prompt essay. My teachers can't help me and I need advice.
The college prompt is: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
The adrenaline rush that comes with sprinting full-speed, and then launching your body into the air is absolutely exhilarating. The pole brings you to new highs before dropping you down into a soft pit. This is the moment every pole vaulter dreams of; either making or breaking it. The difference between making or breaking is simple, dedication. I joined pole vaulting my sophomore year, thinking it would be an easy kickback experience with my friends. Upon joining the sport, practice turned out to be tough and exhausting because of the long hours the JV coach drilled us. After practice, I was sore everywhere, and dreaded going the next day. I skipped many practices, believing that I was natural that didn't need training. On my first meet I walked up to the pit cocky and confident, but ill prepared. My expectations were high, and I thought it would be easy to clear the bar on my first try. I failed miserably, knocking the bar down three times in a row. Humiliated, I realized that to become a great pole vaulter, a lot of practice was required. I was motivated to achieve the highest record on the team, and the only way to do that was to start going to practice. After months of difficult work outs and intense conditioning, I improved my stance and technique. In the following meets, I was able to clear 6, 7, and even 8 feet. New place records motivated me to train even harder. By the final meet, I aimed high for a new record- 9 feet. My head was filled with doubt from the beginning because nine feet a long shot, but I knew that this was my last chance. I started awfully, failing the first two times. I was really determined, so I cleared my mind, shut out negative feelings, and gave it my all. With my heart beating fast, perspiration pouring down my face, I burst into a full on sprint and catapulted myself into the air. The whole thing happened in a split second, but felt like an eternity. My legs, then arms, passed over the bar, barely clearing the 9 foot bar. I had actually achieved my goal: setting the new record. The endless hours of practice had finally paid off, and I had just won the meet of my life. I discovered that I could achieve anything, as long as I put my heart and soul into it.
Thanks!
The college prompt is: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?
The adrenaline rush that comes with sprinting full-speed, and then launching your body into the air is absolutely exhilarating. The pole brings you to new highs before dropping you down into a soft pit. This is the moment every pole vaulter dreams of; either making or breaking it. The difference between making or breaking is simple, dedication. I joined pole vaulting my sophomore year, thinking it would be an easy kickback experience with my friends. Upon joining the sport, practice turned out to be tough and exhausting because of the long hours the JV coach drilled us. After practice, I was sore everywhere, and dreaded going the next day. I skipped many practices, believing that I was natural that didn't need training. On my first meet I walked up to the pit cocky and confident, but ill prepared. My expectations were high, and I thought it would be easy to clear the bar on my first try. I failed miserably, knocking the bar down three times in a row. Humiliated, I realized that to become a great pole vaulter, a lot of practice was required. I was motivated to achieve the highest record on the team, and the only way to do that was to start going to practice. After months of difficult work outs and intense conditioning, I improved my stance and technique. In the following meets, I was able to clear 6, 7, and even 8 feet. New place records motivated me to train even harder. By the final meet, I aimed high for a new record- 9 feet. My head was filled with doubt from the beginning because nine feet a long shot, but I knew that this was my last chance. I started awfully, failing the first two times. I was really determined, so I cleared my mind, shut out negative feelings, and gave it my all. With my heart beating fast, perspiration pouring down my face, I burst into a full on sprint and catapulted myself into the air. The whole thing happened in a split second, but felt like an eternity. My legs, then arms, passed over the bar, barely clearing the 9 foot bar. I had actually achieved my goal: setting the new record. The endless hours of practice had finally paid off, and I had just won the meet of my life. I discovered that I could achieve anything, as long as I put my heart and soul into it.
Thanks!