My journey to Northwestern (Psychology and Law and Psychology and Health)

My response

Coasting down the highway, it was mid-February and school was out for a six day break. Eager to reach my destination, I began my excursion from Atlanta to Evanston, relishing in every mile gained along the boundless highway. 734 miles separated me from Northwestern University's beautiful snow covered, suburban campus. On the second day of my journey, I reached Chicago's metropolitan area and upon spotting the famous museums and attractions I was jolted from my haze of worn cement and white lines. "Yes," I exclaimed, fishing through the depth of my bag to find directions to navigate the unfamiliar streets of Chicago.

Eventually, I reached Evanston-Wildcat territory. As a high school junior, one individual among a mass of prospective students, I hoped to obtain information about the curriculum offered at Northwestern. However, I acquired so much more. During the information session, as an admissions representative described the schools that make up Northwestern, I resolved to spend my next four years wearing Northwestern purple and exploring my passions for Political Science and Psychology in the Weinberg College of Arts and Sciences. Subsequently, I became captivated by the benefits of the quarter system, an unheard of approach to the academic calendar to me. Nevertheless, the quarter system, granting the ability to focus on courses in quarters rather than having to juggle five to six classes a semester, quickly became an asset in my college search. Moreover, I perceived the quarter system to be a medium for autonomy as well as a benefit to students interested in double majoring.

At the session's close, my curiosity drew me towards a mass of purple and white information sheets. Among these pages two headings caught my attention: Psychology and Law and Psychology and Health Professions. Contemplating both law and medicine as future professions, I became curious to learn how Northwestern linked these academic disciplines, so to quell my inquiring mind I collected a copy of both sheets and joined the campus tour. The tour guide's reverence when elaborating on the campus traditions of painting the rock, "Dillo Day" and NUDM compelled me to want to take part in tradition, or even initiate one of my own. Therefore, as my feet crunched against the snow, I imagined myself as a Northwestern undergraduate achieving academic success, engaging in revolutionary research, studying abroad, living in themed housing, and attending football games. I imagined myself as a Wildcat.

Please Help, I know some of it is awkward. Rip it apart if need be. Also I promise to read your essay

Whenever I comment, I tend to focus more on content, and this, was great. I like how you talk about your journey to Chicago, my hometown, and especially Evanston (almost 10 minutes away from me). I have to say, I understand your concern for awkwardness, but in someways it adds character to the essay...I use awkwardness in my essays too.

All in all --it looks great, I especially like your ending!

"Yes!" I exclaimed - try an exclamation point for emphasis.

Subsequently, I became captivated by the benefits of the quarter system, an unheard of approach to the academic calendar. Nevertheless, the quarter system benefited my interest in double majoring. It granted me the ability to focus on courses in quarters rather than having to juggle five to six classes a semester. (I simplified it, you can add autonomy in there somewhere).

I like how you described your Northwestern visit as a journey. Maybe you could expand on Northwestern's Psychology and Law and Psychology and Health Professions and how this could relate to your desire to double major and how only Northwestern had this.

Edit my ND supplement essays please, thanks!

You could drop a proff name or course that looks interesting in here just to show off a little bit.

I can clearly see why NW is good for you. Now tell me why you are good for NW. What do you bring to the campus? Had an experience that makes the quarter system perfect for you? You like alot of things very quickly?

Make this essay sound like a two way bridge. You need NW and NW needs you. If space becomes an issue, cut out the first paragraph. You don't need it very much.