HemcI have had a keen interest in farming since my childhood. For future, I wantedMy dream is to become an educated farmer. That is what makesmade me study hard from the beginning of my school life. I was one of the best in studiesstudents in my school. Therefore, I expected score above 90% in School Leaving Certificate Examination. But unfortunately, I scored only 81% in SLC which is not very good.(something like this maybe : Thus, I was disappointed when I only scored an 81% on the School Leaving Certificate Examination. I had expected to do much better. Because of this score, I was rejected by the prestigious high schools of my choice. This reality was unacceptable to me . I got frustrated. My family put pressure on me to join high school before it iswas too late. So,Frustrated and left with no other choice left , I had to choosechose A-Levels which is not considered good option--a less than admirable option in my country.
I felt like I haveas though I had drifted away from the path of my dream. Thinking that I could not achieve anything from study-even if I study hard-Feeling that my education, regardless of how much effort I exerted, would be fruitless I gradually lost interest in studyin my studies . InsideIn school, I was notoriously famous as a leader of the group that regularly bunked classes, broke school rules, and disrespected teacher. Outside school I was even worse.My family did not support me as I was neglecting studies. I was in a bad company.Take great care to avoid putting the blame on others. It makes you sound irresponsible to admissions staffI was nobody, alone and lonelyI was lost and alone . I had lostgiven up hope. Many negative thoughts came in my mind. I myself lead my life towards darkness. My life was miserable.My life became a miserable one full of darkness.
A Few months past liked that. One day, one of my school friendsa friend of mine suggested me tothat I participate in a spiritual course conducted by the Art of Living organization. At first I refused, but hearing his experience of the course I thought to give it a try. When a person is in darkness, even a small glimpse of light attracts that person. So was I.<-- not grammatically correct or appropriate in this context In the course, I gotgained spiritual knowledge and wisdom. I also learned ways tomethods of mediations and yoga. After a month, I participated in other programs of Art of Living. I learned ways toof deep mediations and high class yoga with much deeper spiritual knowledge. Regular practice of mediations and yoga help me to bring positiveness in my life. It helped me to view life from different prospective. I also knew that there are people with much more difficulties in life, and there is a solution to every problem. We fail in life but that is not the end of life; we are above the problems.Something like:Failure is not definitive; we have the capability to overcome obstacles through perseverance. I regained myselfmy self[ respect and self esteem. Art of L iving helped meto develop my overall personality and become a more mature individual .
Once again, I have ahad hope that I could fulfill my childhood dream can be fulfilled . I studied harder than before and scored good grades in A-levels. I am now ready to face any challenges in my life as I have knowledge and wisdom. As a citizen of Nepal, I want to bring development intothe agriculture system of my country. I want to study agriculture science and bring an agricultural revolution. If a better agriculture system is developed thanthen the living standard of people here will increase and poverty will decrease. That is the reason I want to get best education available in agriculture and chosehave chosen U.S.A. for higher studies.
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I did my best to fix some of the grammar mistakes and unclear wording. Hopefully I didn't leave much out. As for the longer phrases I corrected, they are just suggestions. You should play with the wording so that it's your own voice. Good luck!
