Hi, I'm almost ready to submit the common app for, most likely, the school I want to go to. I'm not worried about getting in (4.0 gpa and 2040 SAT) but I still want to make sure my essay is um.... decent and interesting. I went with promt #1, "Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story." If someone could just tell me what they think of it, or even just a confirmation that I have a good topic would be awesome!!
" The 12-year-old in me would be appalled at my decision to leave behind my dreams of being "Kelsey, art extraordinaire" for a more realistic career in the science field. Don't get me wrong- I absolutely love science. First period Chemistry is still my most beloved high school class to this day. The look on my mother's face when I talk about my latest scientific interests is one of perplexity- she still questions how her daughter can be so excited by something like nuclear substructure. I can't imagine anything else I would want to do with my life, although I haven't always thought that way. When I was younger I thought art was "my thing". All of the admiration from my classmates as they watched me drawing on the backs of my worksheets made me certain that I was meant to be an artist. While my friends tried different sports, my summers were spent in my oldest sister's art classes, trying to immerse myself in as much knowledge as possible. Music quickly made its way into my life, as well, through piano lessons and countless marching band practices.
As I get older, I learn that I'm in fact more of a left-brained person, and that art is not all abstract and subjective. I began to fall in love with the more structural side of art- the rhythmic syncopation of music, how the notes fall into fractions. Or how mixing oil paints is somewhat of a chemistry experiment and sketching is more like Geometry in my own head. Just as how art and mathematics can coincide, I wanted them to exist together in my future. Although I am eager to delve into the world of science in preparation for a career, I don't want to let down the child in me and her sheer devotion to the arts. "
(Note: I may add another paragraph at the end, or just conclude it with a few more sentences. Still working on it, but either way I'm at 306 words.)
" The 12-year-old in me would be appalled at my decision to leave behind my dreams of being "Kelsey, art extraordinaire" for a more realistic career in the science field. Don't get me wrong- I absolutely love science. First period Chemistry is still my most beloved high school class to this day. The look on my mother's face when I talk about my latest scientific interests is one of perplexity- she still questions how her daughter can be so excited by something like nuclear substructure. I can't imagine anything else I would want to do with my life, although I haven't always thought that way. When I was younger I thought art was "my thing". All of the admiration from my classmates as they watched me drawing on the backs of my worksheets made me certain that I was meant to be an artist. While my friends tried different sports, my summers were spent in my oldest sister's art classes, trying to immerse myself in as much knowledge as possible. Music quickly made its way into my life, as well, through piano lessons and countless marching band practices.
As I get older, I learn that I'm in fact more of a left-brained person, and that art is not all abstract and subjective. I began to fall in love with the more structural side of art- the rhythmic syncopation of music, how the notes fall into fractions. Or how mixing oil paints is somewhat of a chemistry experiment and sketching is more like Geometry in my own head. Just as how art and mathematics can coincide, I wanted them to exist together in my future. Although I am eager to delve into the world of science in preparation for a career, I don't want to let down the child in me and her sheer devotion to the arts. "
(Note: I may add another paragraph at the end, or just conclude it with a few more sentences. Still working on it, but either way I'm at 306 words.)