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"To become an able and successful man in any profession, three things are necessary: nature, study and practice," said Henry Ward Beecher. As long as I believe, I already possess all of them except for one: study. Even though my desire to learn has never stopped growing, I missed a chance to enter any of my dream schools due to the severe health problem, which drove me into a series of surgical operations during high school years. While my friends study at their college right after the high school, I devoted myself to the community service by interning at World Vision agency for the disadvantaged, volunteering to clean up the oil-spill region and so on. One of two lessons from this experience was that there is nothing a person can do if they do not have a good education in terms of affecting the world. In other words, the higher education I attain, the more will I be able to improve social irrationality. The other lesson was that individuals have a clear limit to carry weight with the entire society; but as an organization, the power increases. In order to become an influential individual who can lead such organizations in the future, more profound education seems to be necessary. After reaching this conclusion, I decided to leave my homeland for the United States whose flexible educational system provides students with the opportunity to obtain valuable academic experience and pursue an interest inventory as a means of discerning academic interests. My new journey began at the community college in New Jersey, in which I spent two years intensely on improving academic achievements as well as taking an active role in various extracurricular experiences. In particular, experiences such as presiding in the environmental club or working on an honors project as a Phi Theta Kappa (PTK) member helped me to set a major in my mind and make a more detailed blueprint for my future. To be a responsible professional manager with environmental expertise, I need an in-depth study in multiple fields, since modern business world is all about complexity and combination. A four-year university is the very place that can lay groundwork for me to achieve the dream of being a social entrepreneur. By earning more intensive education at a high-quality university, I can go deep into my strong leaning about the social restoration by industrial organization. I might be some years older than students entering straight out of high school. At the same time, supported by the reflection my previous life experience, I am more focused and prepared to proceed to the next part of my academic journey. I am a slow walker, but never walk back like Abraham Lincoln.
"To become an able and successful man in any profession, three things are necessary: nature, study and practice," said Henry Ward Beecher. As long as I believe, I already possess all of them except for one: study. Even though my desire to learn has never stopped growing, I missed a chance to enter any of my dream schools due to the severe health problem, which drove me into a series of surgical operations during high school years. While my friends study at their college right after the high school, I devoted myself to the community service by interning at World Vision agency for the disadvantaged, volunteering to clean up the oil-spill region and so on. One of two lessons from this experience was that there is nothing a person can do if they do not have a good education in terms of affecting the world. In other words, the higher education I attain, the more will I be able to improve social irrationality. The other lesson was that individuals have a clear limit to carry weight with the entire society; but as an organization, the power increases. In order to become an influential individual who can lead such organizations in the future, more profound education seems to be necessary. After reaching this conclusion, I decided to leave my homeland for the United States whose flexible educational system provides students with the opportunity to obtain valuable academic experience and pursue an interest inventory as a means of discerning academic interests. My new journey began at the community college in New Jersey, in which I spent two years intensely on improving academic achievements as well as taking an active role in various extracurricular experiences. In particular, experiences such as presiding in the environmental club or working on an honors project as a Phi Theta Kappa (PTK) member helped me to set a major in my mind and make a more detailed blueprint for my future. To be a responsible professional manager with environmental expertise, I need an in-depth study in multiple fields, since modern business world is all about complexity and combination. A four-year university is the very place that can lay groundwork for me to achieve the dream of being a social entrepreneur. By earning more intensive education at a high-quality university, I can go deep into my strong leaning about the social restoration by industrial organization. I might be some years older than students entering straight out of high school. At the same time, supported by the reflection my previous life experience, I am more focused and prepared to proceed to the next part of my academic journey. I am a slow walker, but never walk back like Abraham Lincoln.