My liberal attitude; Why Yale? - architecture and communication

Can anyone comment on my why Yale short answer? Thanks.

What in particular about Yale has influenced your decision to apply? (Please answer in 100 words or less.)

I view architecture as a platform where I share my concepts with people, whether it's interacting with the city by constantly venturing alone in Shanghai, or observing visitors' exploration as they interact with my design in a cardboard architecture contest, or discussing building technology with students from New Jersey, California, and Belgium when I conducted a research in college. I love to debate, to learn new ideas, and to connect me and the world with my designs. My liberal attitude is shared by Yale's architecture department, as the dean says "We welcome debate, even disagreement."

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This is all you have talked about Yale, but your prompt asks you;


So, they need to know why you need to get into Yale, in particular instead of trying other universities. What differentiates Yale from others in your mind? You need to answer that question here. Study about Yale some more and come up with its features that you find only in Yale.

Thanks for your reply.

What about this new version? I added something new, but I feel like I can't add more points than now if I want to be specific.

From my past experience in an architecture contest and research, I found that architecture can be a platform where I share my concepts with users and the society, and to be inspired by their concepts at the simultaneously. Yale's architecture department shares my attitude, as the dean says "We welcome debate, even disagreement."

With experience in two engineering researches and two team projects, I am also attracted by Yale's engineering school. In addition to abundant undergraduate research opportunities, Yale has the Center for Engineering Innovation & Design, where I can further explore collaborative hands-on innovations that solve real-world problems.

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