Hi, could you help me with my essay please? I think it's too wordy and has too many grammatical errors in it (and too many repetitions)... Really sorry for my English.
Statement of Purpose
Life is a vortex of events, and you never know what tomorrow will be like. So we should adapt to the unexpected, be flexible and never give up. That's what I learned while moving from place to place, following my mother.
I grew up in Russia: the USSR fell two years before my birth and left Russia in ruins, but there was nobody to reconstruct. My childhood was filled with the climat of incertitude, but I was too young to understand the concerns of the grow-ups. I was playing with my friends, going to school and taking pleasure in learning : I always was thirsty for knowledge. When I was 7, I had to stay with my grandparents when my mother left Russia for the USA : as a scientist, she didn't have any job in Russia, and this was her only chance to earn money. I missed her, but learned how to hide my sadness.
When I was 14, I could follow my mother to France, where she had a new project to develop. Everything was new for me : people, language, culture. But I was eager to learn, I worked really hard and soon, I spoke French fluently and was in the top 3 of my class. In France, we moved from place to place, never staying in one place more than for one year because of my mother's work,which was considered as strange by the conservative French society. But this shaped my personality and taught me that it was fine to be different. Moreover, it was an excellent way of meeting new people and making new friends and thus it broadened my horizons.
Then there were 6 months in Texas. I liked this dynamic state with its hospitable people. But soon we had to return to France where I was accepted to one of the best high schools. I had excellent grades in sciences, especially in maths so that my teachers advised me to apply to an engineering school, but I knew that I wanted to be a doctor. I also knew that I wanted to pursue my studies in the US, but I thought that it was a good idea to go to a French medical school first : this was an excellent way of knowing whether medicine was really for me and a highly competitive exam at the end of the year (only 350 out of nearly 1700 would pass) did not frighten me.
I am really enjoying my studies: there is so much to learn, so many exciting new classes, so many interesting new people! We have to work hard, to spend our weekends and holidays doing physics exercises, reading and re-reading biology books and learning organic chemistry, but I don't mind spending eight or ten hours studying on Sunday, as long as what I study interests me. I had the occassion to talk to 3rd and 4th year medical students and to the doctors that came lecturing to the university, and now I am sure of my choice : medicine is for me !
Now I wish to continue my studies in the USA, and UT, I think, is a great choice for me. As I am interested in Human Biology, I would like to specialize in Biological Sciences. What can be more exciting that learning how our body, this perfect mechanism arranged by nature, works ? I know that I will have to work hard to achieve my goal to become a doctor, and to give everything I have in order to succeed, but I am positive that if you have a dream and if you are determined enough, you can make your dream come true!
Statement of Purpose
Life is a vortex of events, and you never know what tomorrow will be like. So we should adapt to the unexpected, be flexible and never give up. That's what I learned while moving from place to place, following my mother.
I grew up in Russia: the USSR fell two years before my birth and left Russia in ruins, but there was nobody to reconstruct. My childhood was filled with the climat of incertitude, but I was too young to understand the concerns of the grow-ups. I was playing with my friends, going to school and taking pleasure in learning : I always was thirsty for knowledge. When I was 7, I had to stay with my grandparents when my mother left Russia for the USA : as a scientist, she didn't have any job in Russia, and this was her only chance to earn money. I missed her, but learned how to hide my sadness.
When I was 14, I could follow my mother to France, where she had a new project to develop. Everything was new for me : people, language, culture. But I was eager to learn, I worked really hard and soon, I spoke French fluently and was in the top 3 of my class. In France, we moved from place to place, never staying in one place more than for one year because of my mother's work,which was considered as strange by the conservative French society. But this shaped my personality and taught me that it was fine to be different. Moreover, it was an excellent way of meeting new people and making new friends and thus it broadened my horizons.
Then there were 6 months in Texas. I liked this dynamic state with its hospitable people. But soon we had to return to France where I was accepted to one of the best high schools. I had excellent grades in sciences, especially in maths so that my teachers advised me to apply to an engineering school, but I knew that I wanted to be a doctor. I also knew that I wanted to pursue my studies in the US, but I thought that it was a good idea to go to a French medical school first : this was an excellent way of knowing whether medicine was really for me and a highly competitive exam at the end of the year (only 350 out of nearly 1700 would pass) did not frighten me.
I am really enjoying my studies: there is so much to learn, so many exciting new classes, so many interesting new people! We have to work hard, to spend our weekends and holidays doing physics exercises, reading and re-reading biology books and learning organic chemistry, but I don't mind spending eight or ten hours studying on Sunday, as long as what I study interests me. I had the occassion to talk to 3rd and 4th year medical students and to the doctors that came lecturing to the university, and now I am sure of my choice : medicine is for me !
Now I wish to continue my studies in the USA, and UT, I think, is a great choice for me. As I am interested in Human Biology, I would like to specialize in Biological Sciences. What can be more exciting that learning how our body, this perfect mechanism arranged by nature, works ? I know that I will have to work hard to achieve my goal to become a doctor, and to give everything I have in order to succeed, but I am positive that if you have a dream and if you are determined enough, you can make your dream come true!