I've lived in a box my whole life. UC Undergraduate Essay

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

I've lived in a box my whole life. When I was a little girl my mother wasn't financially capable of raising my brother and me alone so we had to live in an old trailer that was parked in my grandparent's backyard. With a single parent's income, my mother could only get what help she could afford, which wasn't much. However, she still managed to provide for me and my brother.

Please help me with my essay, I do not know where to take it after this. I need a transition or something. I want to continue to talk about my family and how theyve influenced me and guided me to become the person I am today. How they've allowed me to metaphorically escape from this "box" of a world.

you have chosen a very good and viable topic for your essay. You can write a lot of things in this topic. Perhaps, you may write one more para to describe your community and school . After that you should write about how the community and your family supported you, despite the rough circumstances. like "my mother always supported my studies and did whatever she could to buy me books etc. so that I can become an educated and reputed person. " some instance like these would be fine in your essay. describe how your living conditions have shaped your dreams and so forth.

add all these things and you shall be set to go.
i can't any add more comments as you will first have to write something which can be further improved. i would suggest that u write an essay, no matter how bad it it is , at least once.

once written I can read it and suggest any further improvements. also it will be easy for you to improve your essay once all of it is in front of your eyes.