I love school spirit, but that's not why I'm going to college - why apply to UCF?

If someone will please help me with my essay, I will forever greatful =) I really want to get into UCF, so thank you

In the past few years, worries and dreadful anxiety has plagued me about the location and academic program of colleges. I want a place where I still can be-somewhat-close to home, but still experiencing the "real world" on my own. I don't want a college sorely focused on sports. I don't want a party college. I don't want a college that the majority of people are separated into cliques like high school with all of its petty drama.

Basically, I want a great school that will have great school spirit but will not take up the entire agenda. I want a school that has diversity and embraces differences.

All in all, I wish to go to UCF.
Let me share some info on why I want to go a college like UCF. I have never smoked (or drank). Honestly, I have never done anything even remotely illegal. UCF seems to be a good place to go where there can be socialization but also focused on academics as well.

Don't get me wrong I love school spirit, but that's not why I'm going to college. I'm going to college to learn and get a degree from a respected and prestigious college. I want to go places in my life.

And UCF will offer me that.

I advise you to use "I" less often. Try to start new sentences differently.

Also you can elaborate more on why want to be admitted to UCF. Focus more on how UCF is going to help in the future. Not doing any illegal actions are not "real" reasons.

Don't write words such as "info," but rather "information."

Try to rewrite "I want to go places in my life." What do you mean here? To accomplish things in your life or to travel around the world?

Good job and I hope you get admitted. :)

Thanks so much for the advice! I decided to just scrap it and rewrite my essays over again, your reply actuallly caused me to look back at what I had and realize that it wasn't what I wanted, so thank you again. :)