Hi, all.
I've just started working on my Cornell essay. The deadlines are closing in and I have a lot of applications to finish so I would really appreciate any help on this.
The prompt is: Tell us about an engineering idea you have or about your interest in engineering. Describe how your ideas and interest may be realised by - and linked to - specific resources within the College of Engineering. Finally, explain what a Cornell Engineering education will enable you to accomplish.
I haven't finished the essay yet, but I would really like someone to assess my beginning.
<essay>
My childhood was a little different than that of most people. Toys and games received little admiration from me. I had a slightly different outlook. Machines of all sorts used to command my attention. Toy stores weren't met with as much excitement as hardware stores. I would roam around with my brother, admiring all the power tools, screw drivers and various objects of mechanical capabilities.
My father, an engineer himself, always encouraged independence in work. Instead of calling "the guy", we used to get the tools and fix the issue at hand on our own, learning a lot along the way. This trial and error method proved to be more effective than most people give it credit for and I gained much experience from it.
Mu upbringing in the age of consumer technology was efficiently moderated. My father owns a software company, but we didn't have a family computer until I was 11. While this was initially met with much resentment, I eventually realised how invaluable such a philosophy in my parents' parenting was. I never took technology to be a means of entertainment. It remained a tool which I grew to love, as it was meant to be.
Despite my late initiation into computers, I'm widely regarded as a tech. My acquaintances often ask me how I learned so much about computers and technology, and who taught me. The answer is always the same: experimentation and intuitive learning. A great man once said that true wisdom comes not from knowledge but from hands on experience. A quick reflection on the past 12 years shows me just how true that belief is. Self teaching is, beyond doubt, the greatest method of learning. One make many mistakes, but learns from each one of them.
Over the past few years, I have tried to go further into the workings of different objects and appliances. I applied the knowledge I gained in physics and chemistry to deduce the magic behind seemingly simple objects; such as cameras, bicycle transmission system, computers, etc. There's no feeling better than the feeling I get when suddenly a thought clicks and the gadget in front of me reveals to me how the genius behind its inventors work. It's a feeling worth living for.
</essay>
I plan to write a little about how I like to make and improve things. I have a feeling that this gives a slightly detached approach. Do let me know. Further, I plan to write about what I aspire to be and how Cornell will help me reach my goals.
Thanks a lot
Raptor
I've just started working on my Cornell essay. The deadlines are closing in and I have a lot of applications to finish so I would really appreciate any help on this.
The prompt is: Tell us about an engineering idea you have or about your interest in engineering. Describe how your ideas and interest may be realised by - and linked to - specific resources within the College of Engineering. Finally, explain what a Cornell Engineering education will enable you to accomplish.
I haven't finished the essay yet, but I would really like someone to assess my beginning.
<essay>
My childhood was a little different than that of most people. Toys and games received little admiration from me. I had a slightly different outlook. Machines of all sorts used to command my attention. Toy stores weren't met with as much excitement as hardware stores. I would roam around with my brother, admiring all the power tools, screw drivers and various objects of mechanical capabilities.
My father, an engineer himself, always encouraged independence in work. Instead of calling "the guy", we used to get the tools and fix the issue at hand on our own, learning a lot along the way. This trial and error method proved to be more effective than most people give it credit for and I gained much experience from it.
Mu upbringing in the age of consumer technology was efficiently moderated. My father owns a software company, but we didn't have a family computer until I was 11. While this was initially met with much resentment, I eventually realised how invaluable such a philosophy in my parents' parenting was. I never took technology to be a means of entertainment. It remained a tool which I grew to love, as it was meant to be.
Despite my late initiation into computers, I'm widely regarded as a tech. My acquaintances often ask me how I learned so much about computers and technology, and who taught me. The answer is always the same: experimentation and intuitive learning. A great man once said that true wisdom comes not from knowledge but from hands on experience. A quick reflection on the past 12 years shows me just how true that belief is. Self teaching is, beyond doubt, the greatest method of learning. One make many mistakes, but learns from each one of them.
Over the past few years, I have tried to go further into the workings of different objects and appliances. I applied the knowledge I gained in physics and chemistry to deduce the magic behind seemingly simple objects; such as cameras, bicycle transmission system, computers, etc. There's no feeling better than the feeling I get when suddenly a thought clicks and the gadget in front of me reveals to me how the genius behind its inventors work. It's a feeling worth living for.
</essay>
I plan to write a little about how I like to make and improve things. I have a feeling that this gives a slightly detached approach. Do let me know. Further, I plan to write about what I aspire to be and how Cornell will help me reach my goals.
Thanks a lot
Raptor
