Maintaining the school spirit - 'Why did you apply to UCF?' Freshman Application

All my life I have been moving.From job offers and my parent's divorce, the reasons to move piled up.The only place I could ever call home was the house I grew up in back in New Jersey.Every time I think of that house a sense of warmth runs through my body as I reminisce on childhood memories.Since my childhood, I have not felt part of any community or neighborhood. On July 20th 2011, things changed for me.All of my junior year I had been working in order to save up money to visit one school I had been researching relentlessly, University of Central Florida.Since I live in Pennsylvania, visiting Florida was a costly trip.Although I loved the school as I read about its top-notch academic programs and viewed pictures of its beautiful campus, nothing compared to the feeling I got when I actually arrived at UCF.When I first arrived at University of Central Florida, I felt like I belonged.As I sat in a presentation room with my mom while we waited for the official campus tour, we glanced at each other as we were so impressed with the slideshow filled with facts about how great of a school UCF is.When one of the tour guides finally played a video welcoming us to the university, chills ran down my spine as well as tears filled up my eyes. Something was telling me, "Alexandra, you belong here."I want to be one of those people making UCF proud and maintaining the school spirit.I want to cheer on UCF's sports teams and volunteer.I only want University of Central Florida.

Please ignore the lack of spaces after the periods, when I copy and pasted it did something funky :P Basically everything sounds really cliche but it's all true. UCF is my number one and my dream school, so please let me know if I need to emphasize that any more. Thank you everyone in advance for your help, it really means a lot. :)

...was the house I grew up in back in New Jers---Make sure you leave a space between sentences!

...visit one school I had been researching relentlessly, the University of Central Florida.

Since I live in Pennsylvania, visiting Florida was a costly trip. Al though I loved the school, as I read about its top-notch academic programs and viewed pictures of its beautiful campus, nothing compared to the feeling I got when I actually arrived at UCF.

...we glanced at each other as we were so impressed by the slideshow filled with facts about how great of a school UCF is.

When one of the tour guides finally played a video welcoming us to the university, chills ran down my spine and tears filled up my eyes.

Please ignore the lack of spaces after the periods, when I copy and pasted it did something funky ---I don't know if you meant that for me or the admissions office, but if for them, fix it before sending! Good luck and have fun!

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Haha yes I will fix it for admissions! That would be pretty funny if that little note was for them too. I had it normal before but it pasted weird. Thank you so much for reviewing my essay, it means a lot! :)