'I will make full use of this rare opportunity' -A short essay for a transfer program

Hello (:

Here's a short essay which I wrote for my submission for an AFS scholarship and it has to be below 100 words or 100 the max. AFS is a transfer student program to another country. In which I am applying to America. Would really appreciate the help given as my english is not that good. Well here goes! I am suppose to write a personal statement which is :

1. describing myself, personality, what is important to me
2. My participation in school and community activities
3. What I hope to gain from this program

My name is Swee Lyn. I am known for my bubbly and sociability persona. I am a sport house captain and the vice-president of the English Society. I have participated in various activities such as debate,filming competitions and leadership scout camps. Furthermore, I have contributed to the needy in spastic centres and have done community services. Helping others is important to me because it keeps me happy.

I hope to gain valuable experience that would make me into a better person who can be of service to my country and also to understand the American culture better.

And this one was a question on why do I deserve this scholarship.It has to be below 30 or max 30 too starting fromI will make

I deserve this scholarhip because I will make full use of this rare opportunity and take pride in what I say and do to promote our unique diverse culture as an ambassador of Malaysia.

Oh and hi a student from Malaysia here :D Haha Thank you very much :D

My name is Swee Lyn. I am known for my bubbly and sociabilitysociable personality .

I have participated in various activities such as debate,(missing space) filming competitions and leadership scout camps.

Furthermore, I have contributed to the needy in spastic centres and have done community services
Try to rephrase it. It is unclear. I don't know what you mean by community services.

I hope to gain valuable experience that would make me into a better person who can be of service to my countryserve my country well and also to understand the American culture better.

Hope this helps.

Hi it's good, but you still have to improve your spelling. Your Grammer is well for an ESL student.