We make our happy endings

Successful students at Johns Hopkins make the biggest impact by collaborating with others, including peers, mentors, and professors. Talk about a time, in or outside the classroom, when you worked with others and what you learned from the experience.

we believed in our project

Amid the empty room, all we could really remember was our tiredness, hunger and the countless hours, we spent working on the project. the fair was over and we didn't catch it. Sad ending, isn't it?

We never thought that we can compete in any prestigious competition in our first year in high school, we heard it many times "freshmen don't win" but we believed in our project, this faith derived us to apply for the competition. We spent two months traveling on unpaved roads and returning back to school, daily, but we didn't feel tired because our passion was pushing us to continue. Through these months I began to see things from another perspective, learned to control my body, whatever I did, there were more to give, a man with endless power, indeed. However, we didn't have the experience, or the support but we made an oath to continue together. The exhibition was after a month from then when the exams schedule was hanged; we were shocked to know that the exhibition was on our physics exam. We tried to mail the ministry but they didn't respond. Only one way seemed available, finishing the exam before its time to catch the fair.

A sophisticated problem faced us, question number thirty-two, I still remember it! We finished the exam and ran, ran faster than anything to catch the bus. The road seemed familiar but longer than usual. Sorry, gentlemen but the route is closed because of an accident and we have to change our path. We arrived to find that the fair was over, but there was only one man still reviewing the posters, we told him our story, he agreed to review our project, there was no place on the walls, so we had to hang the poster in turns while presenting. He thanked us and left. We stayed to see the nominations, they were announcing the winners but I didn't care, I fall asleep. Waked up by my two peers, Abdelrahman it's our names, we won! Shockingly, we went to take the medals, the man who was giving the prizes was the same man who judged us, we were surprised that this man was the head judge and he was reviewing the first projects when we rushed in. it was our first competition, then we conquered the rest. That day always remind me to never lose hope because hard work always pays off. Yes, this was my great ending.

Abdelrhman, there is too much collective discussion in this essay. Refrain from using the term "we" and go with first person pronouns instead. By that, I mean me, myself, and I, in reference to the lessons you learned by collaborating with your fellow students on this particular project. Discuss your role in particular in the completion of the project. What did you find easy about the project? What difficulties did you face on an individual basis? How did you react to these difficulties? If you sought the help of your team mates, explain how you did it and what the outcome of the collaboration was. It is important to highlight your time collaborating with your peers and mentors. The idea behind this prompt is to have you explain how you exercise team work. The interview is all about learning how you function in a pressure cooker setting and how you utilize the help of your teammates in such a situation. How do you motivate each other to achieve success? Since this was a very successful project, I bet that you have a lot of stories to share about that. You don't have to detail how the judging went by the way. It is enough for you to just mention that your team won the competition. That story, the way that you are telling now, takes the attention of the reviewer away from the original prompt requirements. So it would be best to revise that part so that you can keep the focus on track with the prompt requirements. Clarify the presentation. Make sure that you explain what sort of test this is. If it was a test, why was it something like a competition? Maybe you can present a situation that is less complicated to explain and analyze for the reviewer? It doesn't need to be complex, it just needs to supply the prompt requirements in the best manner possible, which doesn't waste the time of the reviewer with constant re-reads just so he can figure out what exactly was going on and what your participation may have been. Your participation needs to stand out in the essay throughout the narrative.