im not sure which prompt to put this essay under. i would appreciate any constructive criticism annd help with diction, grammar and style. please also let me know what picture this essay paints of me. thanks
1 Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
3 Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
5 A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an
experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
6 Topic of your choice.
"I don't know what that sign is in English!" Zara said as she drew + on the ice.
My only memory of snow is linked with Zara, someone I met on holiday in Dubai three years ago. A vivacious and energetic girl marched up to me in Ski Dubai and gave me an offer I would have been a fool to refuse.
'Hello, my name is Zara. Can i be your friend?' said the girl with exotic looks.
With a cheesy smile directed to my sisters, I went off to experience a day that hasn't been replicated to this day. Zara, a Saudi Arabian, was also on holiday in Dubai and was staying in a hotel at Mall of the Emirates where Ski Dubai was located. She took me to the best attractions in the ski resort and introduced me to the friends she had made over the week. Soon enough, Zara and I realized we had a lot in common. We both wanted to be architects, we were Muslims and we loved playing games. We traded stories about our lives and switched to personal issues when it became clear that our cultural similarities had been exhausted.
Zara did more than become my friend that day; she exemplified new experiences for me. It was no coincidence that the first snow angel i made was with the girl who taught me the meaning of letting go. Over snowball fights, we taught each other about our different cultures. I learned that it was disrespect to show the soles of my feet to an Arabian; I introduced Zara to Nigerian music. Zara was the antithesis of the average Nigerian. She was extremely friendly and had been brought up to embrace other people without an air of suspicion. She was open and unpretentious and she had no air of self-importance.
Zara taught me to let go of all my inhibitions about people and my actions simply by not being afraid to do so herself. Her befriending me portrayed the friendliness and confidence that I imbibed from that day. Zara helped me understand that no matter where you are, you can always make a connection with someone.
Later that day, I saw a picture of Zara and I. It was a striking portrait of a dark-skinned girl in glasses having fun with a dark haired milky-skinned girl. I refused to wait another thirteen years to meet such an amazing person and made a decision. I picked up the phone to call Zara and continued the friendship she started.
1 Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
3 Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
5 A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an
experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
6 Topic of your choice.
"I don't know what that sign is in English!" Zara said as she drew + on the ice.
My only memory of snow is linked with Zara, someone I met on holiday in Dubai three years ago. A vivacious and energetic girl marched up to me in Ski Dubai and gave me an offer I would have been a fool to refuse.
'Hello, my name is Zara. Can i be your friend?' said the girl with exotic looks.
With a cheesy smile directed to my sisters, I went off to experience a day that hasn't been replicated to this day. Zara, a Saudi Arabian, was also on holiday in Dubai and was staying in a hotel at Mall of the Emirates where Ski Dubai was located. She took me to the best attractions in the ski resort and introduced me to the friends she had made over the week. Soon enough, Zara and I realized we had a lot in common. We both wanted to be architects, we were Muslims and we loved playing games. We traded stories about our lives and switched to personal issues when it became clear that our cultural similarities had been exhausted.
Zara did more than become my friend that day; she exemplified new experiences for me. It was no coincidence that the first snow angel i made was with the girl who taught me the meaning of letting go. Over snowball fights, we taught each other about our different cultures. I learned that it was disrespect to show the soles of my feet to an Arabian; I introduced Zara to Nigerian music. Zara was the antithesis of the average Nigerian. She was extremely friendly and had been brought up to embrace other people without an air of suspicion. She was open and unpretentious and she had no air of self-importance.
Zara taught me to let go of all my inhibitions about people and my actions simply by not being afraid to do so herself. Her befriending me portrayed the friendliness and confidence that I imbibed from that day. Zara helped me understand that no matter where you are, you can always make a connection with someone.
Later that day, I saw a picture of Zara and I. It was a striking portrait of a dark-skinned girl in glasses having fun with a dark haired milky-skinned girl. I refused to wait another thirteen years to meet such an amazing person and made a decision. I picked up the phone to call Zara and continued the friendship she started.
