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Describe the world you come from-for example, your family, community, or school-and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspiration.
As a man and woman from Hong Kong looked down from their airplane onto the San Francisco bay they envisioned a new life for themselves and their three small children. They wanted to raise their children in a communist free society - a place with many opportunities to become successful. Soon after their arrival to the United States reality struck and their life wasn't going to be as picture perfect as they thought it would be.
That man and woman is my parents. When I was younger my sister would take care of my brother and I while my parents went out to look for jobs. After living in the United States for a few months still without jobs my father considered moving back to Hong Kong but my mother refused. She soon found a job after that. Even now, both my parents work menial jobs to provide for our family so that my siblings and I can achieve our own American dream.
My mother was not able to finish high school and my father has some college education. Ever since I was young, my parents have told me how important a college education is. This past Christmas my family went to china to visit my mom's side of the family. As I was there I realized how important going to college and having a successful career is. I learned how lucky I was to be given option of college and to chose what I want to do in the future given my background. My cousin's got to go to college but they were not able to finish and get successful careers. I am no longer just obeying my parents and listening to what they told me, but embracing the importance of college that many other people in this world aren't able to receive. My parents and my family have shaped my dream of going to college and finding a successful career.
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?Essay removed as it has already been posted and commented on in another thread (essayforum.com/2_3269_0.html).