Comments are greatly appreciated.
Thank you
Warren,
Your essay, while it required only a few corrections that I could see, is a work in progress, as far as I am concerned. This does not mean that it is not complete, for it is; it means that the essay can either stand alone or it can be said in so many other ways, or mean so many other things to so many other people. The idea of choosing Magna to use to describe the way you think about doing something with the mind is very unique -- one does not find this attribute in most people's thoughts, which are linear, not like your own.
I liked your essay. In a short fashion, you described how one thinks. And, to that end, you also described how you use a simple concept such as Magna and apply it to the more sophisticated situations in life. And that is unique.
Good Work!
--Mark :)
As a fan of art, I really enjoy drawing
manga;Magna: the Japanese comic.
FromIn my opinion, manga is a media that
communicatescommunicate with people by combining text and pictures.
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For example, if I wanted to show my appreciation to someone's culinary skills, after tasting their good food, instead of saying "it tastes good" I can say "Can I have some more?" both responses indicate that I like the food but the second response shows more appreciation.
--> I certainly like this sentence! It means a lot! It says a lot!