I recycled some parts of my other essay here because I thought the prompts were somewhat similar. I would greatly appreciate any feedback.
What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? This could be your creativity, effective leadership, sense of humor, integrity, or anything else you'd like to tell us about. (*) (200-250 words)
I once had no faith in teachers. As a child, I remember asking teachers a myriad of questions in hope of unveiling the world around me; however, my inquiries often culminated in disillusioning shrugs of ignorance or indifferent replies of "You don't need to know." Thus I disliked teachers. Ironically, I later discovered to my surprise and dismay that I loved to teach. However, through my endeavors, I soon became proud of my passion to teach as I learned that teaching is a noble and humble profession. The teacher not only trains apprentices but also hones own pen of erudition; only together can they fend off the armies of enigma.
When I received my first math puzzles, I was delighted by the hidden messages and logic maps. I was thrilled when the puzzles were finally deciphered and urgently gathered my family to share my findings, only to receive indifferent nods; nevertheless, I was compelled to share my knowledge. I had discovered my love for teaching.
Eventually, as a hobby, I tutored at a math circle; there, I learned that the great teacher learns with his students. I struggled with my students to unearth mathematical mysteries, and, together, we discovered out weakness and worked to improve our skills. In 2010, we marched our way to the states round of MathCounts, and two continued to compete nationally. I was honored to have coached this team and proud of our accomplishments. Through this experience, I tasted the pride and grandeur of the teacher.
Do you think this answers the prompt well?
What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? This could be your creativity, effective leadership, sense of humor, integrity, or anything else you'd like to tell us about. (*) (200-250 words)
I once had no faith in teachers. As a child, I remember asking teachers a myriad of questions in hope of unveiling the world around me; however, my inquiries often culminated in disillusioning shrugs of ignorance or indifferent replies of "You don't need to know." Thus I disliked teachers. Ironically, I later discovered to my surprise and dismay that I loved to teach. However, through my endeavors, I soon became proud of my passion to teach as I learned that teaching is a noble and humble profession. The teacher not only trains apprentices but also hones own pen of erudition; only together can they fend off the armies of enigma.
When I received my first math puzzles, I was delighted by the hidden messages and logic maps. I was thrilled when the puzzles were finally deciphered and urgently gathered my family to share my findings, only to receive indifferent nods; nevertheless, I was compelled to share my knowledge. I had discovered my love for teaching.
Eventually, as a hobby, I tutored at a math circle; there, I learned that the great teacher learns with his students. I struggled with my students to unearth mathematical mysteries, and, together, we discovered out weakness and worked to improve our skills. In 2010, we marched our way to the states round of MathCounts, and two continued to compete nationally. I was honored to have coached this team and proud of our accomplishments. Through this experience, I tasted the pride and grandeur of the teacher.
Do you think this answers the prompt well?