Mechanical Engineering to be my professional career

having trouble with this essay because I am not sure of my exact career choice. I plan to study mechanical engineering but to what exact end...I do not know. is this essay to plain? I'm not sure how to proceed here.

Describe your personal and/or career goals after graduating from UIUC and how your selected first-choice major will help you achieve them.* (150 words)

Of course, I want to enter the workforce upon graduation from University of Illinois. A job is what most people want so they can pay their bills. However, I do not want a job. I want a career because it offers more than just money. It is about connecting to the community and how it makes you feel within it. I want to be excited to go to work. Upon graduation, I will seek work at a place that will support me in my goal to have a meaningful impact. Mechanical Engineering is the study of objects and systems in motion, as such, it touches virtually every aspect of modern life. This versatility will allow me opportunities to engage in a career that creates meaningful technological change. This is my ultimate career.

The essay does not respond to the question at all. Have you heard of a non-answer? It is when you give a response that seems to answer the question, but upon further scrutiny shows that there is actually no substance to the response. You do not have a career plan because you are not sure you are entering the correct major. You can only see a future as a professional, and properly respond to this question once you are sure that you have chosen the right career for yourself. Your answer is not only plain, it is also unrelated to the question being asked. You need to do some self introspection here. Think about what sort of career you might have as a mechanical engineer. Why? Would it be a self fulfilling career for you? How? Those are the questions that should help guide your response to this essay. If you cannot find any answers deep within you to these questions, then you are in the wrong college major. It is not too late to change college major choices yet since you are still applying for admission. Change it while you can.

It's nice to start with the career choice and why you want it.It is kind of plain.

I agree with Holt. I think this essay is very generic and lacks substance. I think it's incredibly important to have a solid idea of what you want to major in and a series of tangible ways a degree in said major will benefit/fulfill you in the future. What you could do is either introspect with yourself to pinpoint exactly how mechanical engineering will help you achieve your goals or consider a different major if you struggle to do the aforementioned.

you should try better and you will get there, but it i great for fisrt time

@Pallaz
The essay is generic. You need to focus on a direct career path that outlines what you want to do for the future and in what ways it is beneficial for you and the community.