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'the mechanics and the science' - USC Short Answer Essay



minijuey 4 / 7  
Nov 27, 2011   #1
Hey guys. I have been working on my USC Short Answer Essay and im not sure if my answer flows very well. Its not done yet, but I would like some tips on how to improve whats already here. Any feedback is helpful thanks.

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.

I have always found it fascinating that we are able to understand the mechanics and the science behind almost anything. I remember being amazed how scientists used radiocarbon dating to figure out the age of ancient rocks and fossils by deducing information from their specific elemental chemistry. But my interest in Chemistry was not boxed in just at school. Upon learning the various laws of science like Newton's laws of motion, the Ideal gas law, the law of conservation and others, I created experiments of my own like figuring out the freezing point depression of solutions that I conjured up in my kitchen sink and determining the specific name of an unknown compound by utilizing the Ideal gas law and Dumas method. My attraction to astronomy stems from the countless unanswerable questions and the overall mystery of space. The idea that so many planets, universes and possibly other forms of life exist behind our blue sphere excites me and drives me to learn the mysteries of the fabric of our cosmos. Having exceptional Astronomy/Chemistry programs at USC, I look forward to taking classes like CHEM 432, Physical Chemistry for the Life Sciences and ASTR 410, Stellar Astronomy. My thirst for knowledge will never go unquenched with the thousands of books located in the twenty-three libraries at USC.

I remember noticing the thick and foggy yellow smoke hovering over Los Angeles as I sat in a car coming back from a road trip. My interest in the environment first began as a curiosity but developed into a passion that led me to join the Green Club at my high school where we set up recycling bins in all the class rooms and held presentations to educate others about ways to easily help the environment. This year DJ Kast, a mentor of a program at USC named QuikSCience, came to our high school to talk about the programs project to spread awareness about marine and freshwater environments. I was instantly interested and am joining the project with my school team to enter the competition and promote awareness.

yasirsarosh 2 / 2  
Nov 28, 2011   #2
you did not address the second part of the question i.e how will you pursue it....also transition from your interest of chemistry to that of astronomy is not smooth
aripeters17 4 / 10  
Nov 30, 2011   #3
Wow this is really great! I like how you were familiar with a lot of the programs that USC offers. It shows that you are truly interested in going there. Even though your essay is definitely on the long side, you didn't put any "filler" or "fluff" sentences. You made every word count, which is important! If you feel uncomfortable with the length, maybe just take a few sentences out. But I really enjoyed reading it!

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