Medical field was always my choice of career - NJIT App

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In the past year I was exposed to the New Jersey Institute of Technology through my close relative, a current NJIT student (Chemical Engineer Major). She has been a strong advocate for the NJIT community by frequently complimenting the avid academic instructors, meticulous courses, rich diversity among student and faculty, and the charming campus. After hearing encouraging reviews from her I was still a skeptic and had to visit the campus for myself. Everything I thought my relative was exaggerated profoundly mirrored my experience on open house tour I was convinced that NJIT's curriculum corresponds with my academic and professional goals. From a cooperative NJIT representative acknowledged the small classes permit students to interact with the professors. However, I am particularly eager about the Biomedical Engineer program available to undergraduate students. Unfortunately, my current University falls short when it is compared to the programs available for Undergraduate students which attend NJIT. Therefore I want to attain the biomedical major to develop an understanding of biological and chemical systems of the human body before entering Medical School.

As far as I can remember the medical field was always my choice of career. I do admit to changing my perception of an ideal career within the study of medicine but always in science department. While attending high school I was exceedingly far more attentive in my AP Biology, Chemistry, and Physics class next to Calculus. For the most part society perceives science major students are born with extraordinary intelligence, though I do believe science major students are incredibly intellectual not from birth but because they are committed to their classes and study routines. Thus it is crucial for the University to have a strict academic environment to further my education. By taking part in the biomedical program I be obtaining a fundamental component for a career in the health professions.

In short, the New Jersey Institute of Technology is everything and more it is known to be. Equipped with extensive programs and experienced professors provokes ingenuity, inspiration, and determination effortlessly because the academic environment is devoted to nourishing learning and intellectualism. It goes without saying that NJIT's reputation in East Coast has influenced me to research more information and discovered graduates students raving about the quality and seriousness each class carries. Therefore, the alumni and current students are accredited to my reason for applying to New Jersey Institute of Technology because they have experienced the classes first hand and perceived success within reach.

Hi,
On the first line, instead of I was exposed, try I was introduced....
Instead of I was still a skeptic and had to visit the campus for myself, use I was skeptical until I visited the campus myself.

Instead of I thought my relative was exaggerated, try stating I thought my family member had exaggerated,
Use a period after open house tour
Instead of From a cooperative NJIT representative acknowledged the small classes permit students to interact with the professors.
Try stating, From the cooperative NJIT representative, who pointed out that small class sizes permit the students to interact with the professors.
As far as I can remember the medical field was always my choice of career
As far back as I can remember, I have always wanted to have a career in the medical field.
I was exceedingly far more attentive in my AP Biology, Chemistry, and Physics class next to Calculus.
I was always favored my AP, Biology, Chemistry, Physics and Calculus classes.
are born
to be born
the University to have
my university of choice to maintain
further my education
help develop my educational discipline
I be obtaining a fundamental component
, I can obtain one of the fundamental components needed
In short, the New Jersey Institute of Technology is everything and more it is known to be. I'm not sure what you are trying to say with this sentence.

Equipped with extensive programs and experienced professors provokes ingenuity, inspiration, and determination effortlessly because the academic environment is devoted to nourishing learning and intellectualism.
With all the extensive program offerings and experienced professors who foster ingenuity, inspiration, determination and academic excellence.
more information and discovered graduates students raving about the quality and seriousness each class carries.
further and I discovered graduate students who rave about class quality and earnestness of the staff and students.
are accredited to my reason for applying
can be credited to influencing my decision to apply

I hope this helps!
Nadine

Thank you! I'm so glad that I posted my essay before sending it in :)

In the past year I introduced to New Jersey Institute of Technology from my close relative, a current NJIT student (Chemical Engineer Major). She has been a strong advocate for the NJIT community and frequently complimented the avid academic instructors, meticulous courses, rich diversity among student and faculty, and the pleasant campus. However, I was skeptical until I visited the campus myself. Everything I heard from my friend profoundly mirrored my experience on open house tour and convinced me that NJIT was the right school for me. From the cooperative NJIT representative, I learned that small class sizes permit the students to interact with the professors. Though, I am particularly excited about the Biomedical Engineer program available to undergraduate students. Unfortunately, my current University falls short when compared to the programs available for Undergraduate students which attend NJIT. Therefore, I want to attain the major to develop an understanding of biological and chemical systems of the human body before entering Medical School.

As far back as I can remember, I have always been interested in careers in the medical field. I do admit that I have changed my perception of an ideal career within the study of medicine but always in science department. While attending high school I favored my AP Biology class because it discussed questions about how the plants convert the suns energy to sugar and insights of how the world may have been created. For the most part society perceives science major students to be born with extraordinary intelligence, though I do believe science major students are incredibly intellectual not from birth but because they are committed to their classes and study routines. Thus it is crucial for the University to have a strict academic environment to further my education. By taking part in the biomedical program I will be obtaining a fundamental component for a career in the health professions.

In short, the New Jersey Institute of Technology has really surpassed my expectations. With all extensive program offerings and experienced professors who foster ingenuity, inspiration, and determination and academic excellence. The academic environment is devoted to the nourishment knowledge and intellectualism. It goes without mentioning that NJIT's reputation in East Coast has deeply influenced me to research more information and discovered graduate students who rave about the quality and earnestness of the staff and students. Therefore, the alumni and current students can be credited for my reason to apply for NJIT because they have experienced the classes first hand and perceive success within reach.