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"Music relaxes me" - MIT pleasure essay



shadowfax 5 / 21  
Dec 12, 2010   #1
We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Music is something that always made me feel relaxed no matter how stressed I am. As I watch videos on how play a song on piano, I try my best to keep a photographic memory of the notes being played and then I try to play it on my keyboard. Even though, I am a naive keyboard player and still cannot read sheet music, I enjoy the pleasure that I am playing my favorite song on the keyboard. Therefore, whenever I find free time, I play my keyboard, which gives me the utmost pleasure and satisfaction.

Is it good or bad? Please be candid.

Oleh 5 / 32  
Dec 12, 2010   #2
AHHH... the dreadful 100words or fewer response lol
it's harder to write than an essay because it doesn't give u a lot of room to explain.
I like how you talk about musci because it's probably something that is unrelated to your major...
but this response it boring...
start out with like an action of you playing a specific song or quote something like "F sharp..no,no..B?" something like that...i donno

i just think it's so bland...
ltp_1984 1 / 4  
Dec 12, 2010   #3
I also wrote about music, but guitar. U seem quite similar to me.
I faced the same problem. I know how difficult it is to wrote in 100 words.

I think your essay is fine, but not very special because after read your essay I feel that u like playing keyboard but not very passionate in it. But I don't really know how to change it.

Maybe you can talk about how your soul connects to the musics you play? OR Which song you play when U sad, happy ...? How your emotion change after play a song?

I mean you should talk more specific about your feeling.

That's my idea. Hope it's useful!
Good luck to you!
OP shadowfax 5 / 21  
Dec 13, 2010   #4
Emerged in a cavernous depth of emotional sounds, I am moved to. Watching videos on how to play a song on the piano, I keep a photographic memory of the notes being played and then play it on my piano. Even though, I am a dilettante and still cannot read music, I enjoy playing my favorite songs as it gives me the utmost pleasure and satisfaction..

I rewrote this essay and made it kinda short. I don't know what else I can add on here. Please help...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 22, 2010   #5
Emerge means to rise up out of it. Maybe that first word should be "submerged?"

Submerged in a cavernous depth ---but then, depth cannot be cavernous, so you still have to rework this sentence.

of emotional sounds, I am moved, too .

gives me the utmost pleasure and satisfaction..--Right here, I bet you can come up with a clever way to express the same idea... a way to make the reader able to understand it a little.

:-)


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