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A NARRATIVE ESSAY BASING ON A PIECE OF MUSIC



DAILOIUTE 1 / -  
Oct 28, 2017   #1
Instruction: Choose a piece of music and listen to it. When you hear the music, who do you imagine is happening? Write a story that describes what is happening in the music, at least 250 words.

Never



Have you ever wondered, whether a girl still loved a boy if she realized that her partner had been caught in a chronic disease?. The boy in the song "Never" (by Trung Quân) was in such situation. Although the two lovers were in their blooming-stage affection, they had to be separated due to the boy's strangely-behaved actions, which was absolutely unexpected by the two and led to audience's full-of-regret mood.

It was obvious that the young boy and his beloved girlfriend were enjoying their fabulous days together. They are both in their twenties, the most meaningful and dynamic phase in human's life. The boy had got a handsome appearance, and the girl's beauty was alluring as well. One day, when he entered a luxury café, he immediately took notice of a charming girl chatting with her teammates. His heart leapt at the time and he realized that he had fallen head over heels in love with her. From then on, in his effort to flirt the girl, he was always escorting her to do everything that he thought she wanted despite her ignorance. Day by day, he never gave up his one-side love, and the girl finally perceive his honesty and accepted to start a love relationship with him. They used to have memorable moments together that can easily get envy from others. Some of the things were that they were side by side all the time, hung out to save only-one-time-in-life memories and gave each other passionate kisses. From what was going in their love, it was undoubted that the couple was the happiest ever.

Everything have gone on perfectly until one day, the boy received a medical record from his private doctor showing that he was caught in a chronic disease and there was no much more time for him. "What should I do now?", he wondered in his severely depression; he loved her so much, and he did not want to leave her. At first, he wished that he could make best use of the rest of his time to do everything he could to make his darling pleased. Although he was seriously ill, he pretended as if there was nothing happen to him and he was so blissful together with his lover. Soon after that, his health was getting worse and worse and he realized that he himself had no more time left. Eventually, he made up his mind to make a perfect plan to break up with the girl to let her have a happy life instead of suffering the pain of leaving a diseased person because of death. He strived to get away from her, not to talk to each other as they used to. The girl did not know what was happening with the one she put her deepest affection in. She was extremely upset. She wanted to know why he behaved so strangely but what she received was her boyfriend's insulting words. The couple even quarreled many times but that led to no result.

Then, the girl decided to secretly discover what was wrong with her boyfriend. She stealthily follow him and accidentally found that he was writhing with a bunch of blister packs of drugs surrounded in his own room. There was no point for her getting into a panic about the scene. She hurriedly took him to the nearest hospital, but everything was too late. He had passed away. She cried a lot. And she finally realized that her most devoting partner still loved her unconditionally, and that he had cheated her is just because he had wanted her to have a happier life without his presence.

After listening to the song's lyric as well as the MV version, I realise that when you really cares about someone, their happiness matters more than yours. And the saying "To love is to sacrifice" is somehow true in this case. In conclusion, the song "Never" is worth enjoying work, and it brings audience a new standpoint about love and to be loved.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Oct 28, 2017   #2
Oops! At first I thought that you understood the prompt requirements perfectly. Then I got to the last paragraph of the essay and learned that you listened to the song lyrics instead. So you are just retelling the story based on the song itself. You are not making up a story based on the music alone for this essay. The mistake on your part was you chose a piece of music that already had a story to tell. So you just went ahead and retold it. What the prompt is asking for is an original story that came out of your imagination. I would suggest that you change your approach to this story. Instead of picking a popular song with lyrics, choose an original instrumental composition to listen to instead. Then listen to the music. Close your eyes, write down what you begin to imagine as the music progresses. Imagine the story that can take place, how it would unfold, and how it would end. Choose one of the classics in this instance. One of my favorite instrumentals is Tales From the Vienna Woods. The music unfolds in a setting that can easily be imagined and a story can easily be developed to take place within the musical setting. The notes are both fun and dramatic, and creates a proper sense of climax at certain points in the composition. That is something that you cannot achieve when you listen to modern music that already has lyrics in worked in.
snpcosmic - / 2  
Nov 8, 2017   #3
I would like to point out some grammatical mistakes.
1. finally perceived his honesty
2. Everything have gone on perfectly -- here I would advise you to change "have gone on" to "has gone" or "was going on"
3. really cares a


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