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Colgate prompt (250 words)
We honor the many different forms of diversity in our community. Your perspective is valuable because it comes from your life experiences, family backgrounds, and culture. Please tell us about yourself, how you plan to share your perspective with the Colgate Community, and what you hope to learn from other members of the community.
As my parents were always occupied with work, taking care of my diabetic grandpa and my gouty grandma became my responsibility since I was eleven. Cooking meals, doing housework, taking Grandpa and Grandma to their physical therapy sessions seemed arduous at first, yet these were easy tasks compared to accepting the fact that my grandparents, who brought me up since infancy, returned to the vulnerability of delicate children and hiding my worries and trepidation. But through taking Grandma to the ER and calling an ambulance for Grandpa, I have become more mature at handling difficult situations.
Looking after my grandparents, volunteering at a nursing home and assisting with elderly care at a hospital all made me realize how the aged long for care and affection. I hope to continue my endeavor in providing emotional support to the old and encourage Colgate fellows to visit the 66 nursing homes near Hamilton, NY. I would also love to dedicate myself to setting up overseas exchange programs between Colgate, Taiwan and China. With such connection, not only can the Colgate community experience Chinese culture in depth, but Taiwanese and Chinese students can benefit from exploring their potential through an elite liberal arts education. At Colgate, I would hold onto the opportunity of learning new perspectives from the diverse student body and discovering new ways to contribute to the community by joining COVE. A Colgate education will help me fulfill my aspirations of becoming a social entrepreneur and advocating the empowerment of the disadvantaged.
Colgate prompt (250 words)
We honor the many different forms of diversity in our community. Your perspective is valuable because it comes from your life experiences, family backgrounds, and culture. Please tell us about yourself, how you plan to share your perspective with the Colgate Community, and what you hope to learn from other members of the community.
As my parents were always occupied with work, taking care of my diabetic grandpa and my gouty grandma became my responsibility since I was eleven. Cooking meals, doing housework, taking Grandpa and Grandma to their physical therapy sessions seemed arduous at first, yet these were easy tasks compared to accepting the fact that my grandparents, who brought me up since infancy, returned to the vulnerability of delicate children and hiding my worries and trepidation. But through taking Grandma to the ER and calling an ambulance for Grandpa, I have become more mature at handling difficult situations.
Looking after my grandparents, volunteering at a nursing home and assisting with elderly care at a hospital all made me realize how the aged long for care and affection. I hope to continue my endeavor in providing emotional support to the old and encourage Colgate fellows to visit the 66 nursing homes near Hamilton, NY. I would also love to dedicate myself to setting up overseas exchange programs between Colgate, Taiwan and China. With such connection, not only can the Colgate community experience Chinese culture in depth, but Taiwanese and Chinese students can benefit from exploring their potential through an elite liberal arts education. At Colgate, I would hold onto the opportunity of learning new perspectives from the diverse student body and discovering new ways to contribute to the community by joining COVE. A Colgate education will help me fulfill my aspirations of becoming a social entrepreneur and advocating the empowerment of the disadvantaged.
