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This section is an opportunity for you to elaborate on the information you have provided earlier. You may discuss a special talent, a personal experience or an activity that you have been involved in that is relevant to the course you are applying for admission.
As your essay is limited to only 2000 characters (including punctuations and space), do present your ideas in a focused and thoughtful manner.
Scrolling down the long list of programs offered by NUS, I found myself overwhelmed and lost. Dad was encouraging me to pursue engineering whilst Uncle was rooting for me to be a doctor. "Typical expectations from an Asian family," I thought. However, I was not interested in those options at all.
I was a pure science student while doing CAL as well as during my secondary school years. Though I excelled in Science, I always had an artistic side. As much as I enjoyed conducting experiments and learning scientific theories, I liked Arts & Crafts, theatre, singing, dancing and so on. I was drawn to a wide range of hobbies and interests and enjoyed learning a bit of everything. So, over the years of schooling, I took part a variety of ECAs. I was involved in badminton, basketball, squash, debating, robotics, drama, Interact Club, Gamelan (Indonesian traditional music) and Glee Club, just to name a few. I guess you could say that I was a versatile person or a Jack-of-all-trades for I acquired plenty of soft skills, leadership skills and personal experiences over the years.
Instead of looking at science related programs, I found myself constantly researching majors offered by FASS and Psychology was the particular subject that caught my attention as it is said to be a mesh between science and arts. It involves using scientific methods, which I am familiar with to study the complex science of human behavior, which I find rather interesting and unconventional.
After much thought and research, I found that psychology covers a wide scope of future prospects and most importantly it was what I was most interested in it.
I want to look into the complexity and art of being human, what and how things affect us and possibly use this set of knowledge to help others.
I strongly believe that passion is what drives us to do our best. Therefore, I decided to follow my heart and chose something that interested me instead of following the norm for most science students.
"I liked Arts & Crafts, theatre, singing, dancing and so on." Perhaps cut out the "and so on". Instead, make it "theatre, singing and dancing."
"I took part a variety of ECAs." ..."I took part in a variety of ECAs" (small correction!)
Great essay, though. Good luck!
I decided to follow my heart and chose something that interested me instead of following the norm for most science students.
I decided to follow my heart and
choose something that interested me instead of following the norm for most science students.
I am not sure about the tense here. But your language is really excellent!
