This is what I included in my "Additonal Information" section of the Common App for NYU, do you think this is what they're looking for? (After my little "personal statement" essay, I attached my Resume on the next page!) Please edit/give feedback on what you think!
For as long as I remember, I wanted to learn as much as possible about everything around me. When I was six, I was determined to become a chemist. At age eight that aspiration faded away after I resolved one day to become a news anchor on CNN. Over the course of my childhood, I also dreamt of becoming a journalist, a software engineer, an archeologist, a talk show host, a dermatologist, and even a spy for the C.I.A.
During my high school years, I came to understand myself and my passions better as I grew more aware of my skills and potential. I always had an inner drive to succeed and constantly searched for new ways to do or improve everything. By nature, I realized that I had an entrepreneurial spirit and decided that majoring in business would allow me to tap into my creative and innovative mind.
I admire the successful business leaders of our time like Bill Gates. He not only developed a company that revolutionized the modern way of life, but he also gave back to the community so that others may have the education they need to live out their dreams. Bill Gates is my role model and, like him, I want to provide a service to our world that benefits society, allowing me to take action that helps alleviate problems like lack of education. I am tech-savvy and dream of owning my own software corporation one day, such as Microsoft. I have already had a lot of exposure in the business field through internships, summer programs, and independent research on this topic.
I believe New York University will challenge and inspire me to take my goals further. College is a time to explore various interests and take advantage of the opportunities available. I am eager to pursue my interest in business in order to make a positive difference in society. I am confident that my passion and commitment for continuous learning will aid me in whatever path I choose to take in college and beyond.
MY NAME
ADDRESS
PHONE NUMBER ----- E-MAIL ADDRESS
OBJECTIVE
To major in marketing and finance in order to gain employment in the business sector.
WORK EXPERIENCE
Youth Leadership Program Participant July 1 - August 6, 2009
- Play Writing
- Internship with Housing & Communities Development
- Public speaking
- Collaboration with Elected Officials
- Housing Inspections
VOLUNTEER WORK
Grimsley Global Citizen Corps August 2008 - Present
President/Founder
- Recruited about 200 members
- Organized and assisted in activities and projects
- Monitored financial records and organized fundraisers
- Donated over 300 pounds of food to Urban Ministry
- Won a $500 grant from DoSomething Organization
- Held a hunger party on World Food Day
- Made T-Shirts & to promote our cause and spread word
- Raised awareness about poverty around the world
- Took action to fight against poverty
- Gained recognition from community and extended organization beyond school setting
Greensboro Historical Museum June 2006 - Present
- Guided tours
- Assisted and monitored activities for young children
- Worked as phone receptionist and provided information to visitors
- Took charge in various posts during community events sponsored by the Historical Museum
Greensboro Youth Council August 2007 - Present
Council member
- Volunteered for various community service and events
Back to School Bash; Ghoulash! Halloween Festival; High IQ Bowl
- Attended training for sign language and public speaking.
SUMMER PROGRAMS
Lead America Global Business & Entrepreneurship June 15 -25, 2008
- Elected as the VP Financial Assistant for company
- Assisted in drafting business plan and presentation to capital ventures
- Collaborated with team members on improving company status
- Attended business leadership training sessions and listened to speakers
Lead America National Youth Leadership July 18-28, 2008
- Attended various political & leadership training session & met with speakers
- Participated in programs and discussions about our nation
- Gained a better understanding of our national government and politics through various activities - such as lobbying, petitioning, working for the CIA, etc.
Free Enterprise Leadership Conference June 16-June 21, 2009
- Worked as the VP of Accounting for company
- Assisted in drafting company's business plan
- Attended business trainings and listened to speakers
- Wrote a business plan for exporting a valuable product to another country
- Kept financial records and raised over $400 in profit for our company
ASPIRE Journalism Camp August 2008
Meredith Looking Toward College Program June 2007
SCHOOL ORGANIZATIONS
National Honors Society 2008 - present
National French Honors Society 2008 - present
Academic Team 2007 - present
- Tar Heel Cup
- Quaker Cup
- Knowledge Master Open
Lacrosse 2006 - present
Most Improved Player Award
C.A.S.(Creativity, Action, & Service) 2007 - present
Alliance Francais (French Club) 2007 - present
Amnesty International 2007 - present
A.C.E.(Act to Conserve the Environment) 2006 - 2008
Speech & Debate 2006 - 2007
AWARDS/HONORS
AP Scholar with Honor, National Society of High School Scholars Ambassador, Academic Excellence Award, Scholar Athlete Award, Global Citizen Corps Leader, IB Diploma Candidate
SKILLS
Piano - playing since age 9 2002 - Present
Web Design - self-taught myself at age 10 2003 - Present
- Fluent in HTML, CSS, & JAVA SCRIPT
Java Programming
Speed Typing - 78 words / minute
EDUCATION
Grimsley Senior High School 2007-present
801 Westover Terrace
Greensboro, NC 27410
Western Guilford High School 2006-2007
409 Friendway Rd
Greensboro, NC 27410
Kernodle Middle School 2005-2006
3600 Drawbridge Pkwy
Greensboro, NC 27410
Davis Intermediate School (Gifted Studies Program & CA Junior Scholarship Federation alumni) 2004-2005
Parkview Elementary School 2001-2004
References Available Upon Request
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I'm not sure, but I really don't think the additional portion should be this long, or that your application should even include your resume. On a lot of school websites, they mention that they know what they want, and they discourage sending extra info
and the essay I believe should go in the NYU supplement?
alright, that's kinda what I was thinking... but what should I include in my additional information then? Things I couldn't fit into the rest of my common app, like more AP EXams or activities n such?
For me, I used the additional info portion to explain stuff like why I had a non-academic teacher write an additional rec for me, and why I've had 2nd period free/ TA since sophomore year. I think you're just supposed to submit things that you feel the admissions will be "confused" at. I'm not 100% sure though, maybe you could ask a conselor?
