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Prompt- NYC is an essential element of academic and cultural life here at NYU. If you could engage in an activity or start a club, or service organization at NYU, what would it be and how would you envision it impacting the larger community?
As a New Yorker I know the immense diversity of the city and the importance of getting to know people. One club that I would be especially interested in would be the Commuter Club. Since the club specializes in giving students the opportunity to meet and socialize, I would join to meet new people and to help others meet people as well. I would also be interested in the Model United Nations, where I could discuss with others the issues of the day which spreads knowledge throughout the community.
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Prompt- Please tell us how you spent most of your summer vacation.
I spent most of my summer vacation worrying out about college. I visited several schools; namely the University of Pennsylvania and Boston University. The visits were informative, but they didn't ease any of the anxiety that there is throughout the admissions process. During the summer I also went to Mexico to visit my family. The trip was very relaxing as I had plenty of fun with my family; playing board games and reminiscing about things that had happened since we had last gotten together.
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Prompt- Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college and what interests you most about your intended discipline.
I selected the Stern school because of its educational rigor and leadership in the business world. After participating in my school's Youth Leadership Forum for four years, I have decided that I only want to apply to schools that exhibit a direction that will help me enhance my leadership qualities. Given Stern's prestige, I will be exposed to countless opportunities in business and hope to be immersed in research programs like the Salomon Center for the Study of Financial Institutions.
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Prompt- Describe a trait or characteristic passed along to you by your family. Tell us why you like or dislike this aspect.
Although the characteristic of being insistent is usually shown negatively, I am proud to say that I have had this trait passed on to me by my family. My grandma is 95 years old, and she pushes herself to continue living so that she can see her loved ones for even a day longer. My mother is insistent too as she pushes me every day; whether it is to do my homework or to join a club. This trait, often seen as one of "naggers", is vital to my life and a quality I would never hope to get rid of.
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prompt- You have been selected to sing at a talent show. What song would you sing? Why?
My selection would be "We Didn't Start the Fire" by Billy Joel.
This song would be perfect for me because I don't have a great voice, the song is really fun, and the song is very well known. I would have plenty of fun trying to remember all of the words of the song, but because of my inadequate singing I would have to rely on the audience to pick me up and sing with me, masking the terrible noise that would be coming from the microphone.
Prompt- NYC is an essential element of academic and cultural life here at NYU. If you could engage in an activity or start a club, or service organization at NYU, what would it be and how would you envision it impacting the larger community?
As a New Yorker I know the immense diversity of the city and the importance of getting to know people. One club that I would be especially interested in would be the Commuter Club. Since the club specializes in giving students the opportunity to meet and socialize, I would join to meet new people and to help others meet people as well. I would also be interested in the Model United Nations, where I could discuss with others the issues of the day which spreads knowledge throughout the community.
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Prompt- Please tell us how you spent most of your summer vacation.
I spent most of my summer vacation worrying out about college. I visited several schools; namely the University of Pennsylvania and Boston University. The visits were informative, but they didn't ease any of the anxiety that there is throughout the admissions process. During the summer I also went to Mexico to visit my family. The trip was very relaxing as I had plenty of fun with my family; playing board games and reminiscing about things that had happened since we had last gotten together.
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Prompt- Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college and what interests you most about your intended discipline.
I selected the Stern school because of its educational rigor and leadership in the business world. After participating in my school's Youth Leadership Forum for four years, I have decided that I only want to apply to schools that exhibit a direction that will help me enhance my leadership qualities. Given Stern's prestige, I will be exposed to countless opportunities in business and hope to be immersed in research programs like the Salomon Center for the Study of Financial Institutions.
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Prompt- Describe a trait or characteristic passed along to you by your family. Tell us why you like or dislike this aspect.
Although the characteristic of being insistent is usually shown negatively, I am proud to say that I have had this trait passed on to me by my family. My grandma is 95 years old, and she pushes herself to continue living so that she can see her loved ones for even a day longer. My mother is insistent too as she pushes me every day; whether it is to do my homework or to join a club. This trait, often seen as one of "naggers", is vital to my life and a quality I would never hope to get rid of.
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prompt- You have been selected to sing at a talent show. What song would you sing? Why?
My selection would be "We Didn't Start the Fire" by Billy Joel.
This song would be perfect for me because I don't have a great voice, the song is really fun, and the song is very well known. I would have plenty of fun trying to remember all of the words of the song, but because of my inadequate singing I would have to rely on the audience to pick me up and sing with me, masking the terrible noise that would be coming from the microphone.