This is for my ApplyTexas College application Topic B, Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.
Any input would be greatly appreciated.
A Flaw in the Ranks
I am just a number in the eyes of a college admissions office. In any system of organization, there will always be flaws and it is almost impossible that everyone can benefit. One system that has affected me once and I am looking forward to revision is Class Rank. It has been known as one of the "must haves" in high school if a student wants to enter in a prestigious college. But what if that system works against the students where it keeps certain students out of the college of their choice due to ranking.
The class rank system does not give the majority of students a fair chance into getting in to college. I have come to learn about this issue through personal experience. Growing up in one of the best school districts in Texas can have its ups and downs. It's great for me because I have more opportunities provided by my school district compared to others. Unfortunately Lovejoy High School happens to be one of the most competitive schools in the state. Out of the 280 students in my class, over 90 of them have a GPA of at least 4.0. Now out of those 90 students only 28 are considered in the top 10% of the class. For those 28 students the college application process will not be as demanding for the others not in the top 10%.
Why should a student be denied greater education because of an unfair number given to them during high school? The college admission process puts enormous amount of pressure on the class rankings of prospective students. Unfortunately, the rule is unfair for a majority of students. I am not in the top 10% or first quartile in my graduating class. My GPA grade is 4.01 and I'm on the top 32% of my graduating class. I'm concerned about my chances in getting into my dream college. I worked hard like everybody in my class but my graduating class of 2013 is an extraordinary pool of smart students. Compared to the top 28 students in my class, I only differ by a mere .2 or .3 GPA points. My performance in school can be considered parallel to those of the top 10%, and only skewing by a few fractions of a point. Another difficulty for me is the fact that I am a year ahead for my age. If I had not tested out of 1st grade, I would be in a class with students my age, giving myself a greater chance in performing on a level equal to those of my class.
Most likely nothing will change in the near future. At least not enough change that it would benefit me in my application process for college. But for the benefit of all prospective students applying to college, the weight colleges put class rank for college admissions should undertake a new decision to create a more equal deciding factor for college admissions
I am just a number in the eyes of a college admissions office.
Too negative, maybe you can re-word this to sound more positive, as it is the purpose of your paper- to explain why you feel that GPA should not count for so much of a student's success. Be sure to shine yourself in the best light.
It has been known as one of the "must haves" in high school if a student wants to enter in a prestigious college. But what if that system works against the students where it keeps certain students out of the college of their choice due to ranking.
Don't use so many questions, be more clear and concise. Maybe say it like this: "Commonly, a high GPA is essential for a student who wishes to enter a prestigious college. However, this ranking can be a downfall for a student who is otherwise successful in many areas." Be sure to not sound like you are rambling.
Most likely nothing will change in the near future. At least not enough change that it would benefit me in my application process for college. But for the benefit of all prospective students applying to college, the weight colleges put class rank for college admissions should undertake a new decision to create a more equal deciding factor for college admissions
Clean it up here, be more clear about what you are really saying. "link" your major point to your own story without being too negative. Connect this idea to your college goals briefly, and show a bit of your personality, if possible. Good luck in school!!
