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'This opportunity of leading my house' - meaningful event



harshlimbasia 1 / 2  
Oct 31, 2011   #1
Write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service

People believe that being a leader is the easiest thing to do, where you just have to command and the rest will follow. But that is not at all true. Being a house captain, for the first time this year (and in my life too), I have found that leading is not at all that easy. Having two major responsibilities: make my house win as many inter-house events as possible and at the same time help the school to function smoothly and maintain the decorum. My experience of being a house captain was till now the most memorable one. Apart from my own studies, I also have to maintain a watch on what my juniors are doing, where are they struggling and help them find out ways to overcome that.

This opportunity of leading my house is also responsible for overcoming my two major drawbacks: my lethargic attitude that I had due to lack of responsibilities and my stage fear. The responsibilities that I received with my badge, slowly transformed me to an enthusiastic person who is always quick on his feet. Let it be any of the school events, any form work or any form of community service, I am the one on whom the students, teachers or my parents always count on. These days, I have started to take initiatives to plan out different inter-house events that would be interesting and also at the same time help all the participants and the audience acquire some good habits that would be helpful. Recently other group captains and I planned out a newspaper quiz that would promote the idea of reading newspaper and cultivate a habit of reading it daily. The higher school authorities readily accepted the idea.

At the beginning of the year, when our school was divided into four houses, all the students, including me, felt that our group was the weakest one. We didn't have any sportsman nor did we have anyone who was too intelligent. But today, after completing around 7 events, our group stands second in the rankings with just 20 points shy from the group with first place. Maybe this was the result of our team spirit and a positive attitude in our minds. This is how even my stage fear vanished. Now I can easily speak up to an audience of any magnitude, with confidence and determination.

I have only 30 students in my group compared to the 30,000 undergrads at UF. But to me, the number doesn't matter anymore because I have learnt one of the most important skills of my life: leadership. I am sure to bring along this quality as my major asset when I come to UF. Whether it's organizing a house party or a fund-raiser, I am sure to be actively involved in all the happenings at UF. I believe if you are able to communicate to the masses, if your voice can make people follow you into doing good deeds, then your skill is justified.

OP harshlimbasia 1 / 2  
Oct 31, 2011   #2
Someone please help me out here
elijahcrago 2 / 6  
Oct 31, 2011   #3
Restructure your first sentence. CONCISELY exlain what a house captain is without dragging on. Talk about what iniatives you take instead of talking about how people turn to you. Talk about how your leadership will apply and transfer to the college setting and tie in how that will become useful. Wish I hand more time to really help with grammatical and other mistakes but I'm pretty busy. Figured I could help though. Good essay for the most part.
OP harshlimbasia 1 / 2  
Oct 31, 2011   #4
Thanx for going over it. Will modify it a little :)
wayne 1 / 1  
Nov 1, 2011   #5
yeah you need to explain how your leadership skills will apply to UF. tell what you can do for them and how UF will also help you and benefit you. i didn't see any moajor grammar mistakes except maybe you should put 'learned' instead of 'learnt'.


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