I had to write a 300 word essay on my most important achievements and contributions.
This was the prompt: Describe the highlights of your most important achievements and contributions. If you have an outstanding talent(eg. National Sportsman, run a successful business, outstanding community service) include them as well.
It is exact 300 words. Please let me know If what I have written is good enough. Any kind of grammatical errors, problems in sentence formation and structure, or anything. Please help in such way that i don't exceed the word limit. I think that I don't have a very good start. I wanted a catchy start that hooks the reader to the essay. I would be very grateful if you could help me out as soon as possible since I have to submit my application within a week. Thank you very much!
From the very beginning, I loved to be a part of every activity conducted in my school. My qualities of being a responsible and a devoted student and participation in numerous extra-curricular activities of the school, got me nominated for being the Vice Head Girl. Even though I did not get that honor, I did not lose hope. After facing the tough elections for the Student Body, I got the opportunity to be the Vice Captain of Wisdom House. In the subsequent year I was acknowledged as the Captain. It was then that I learnt to be more responsible and agile. Encouraging my house members to participate in house activities, solving their problems, enjoying every victory with them, conducting house meetings and motivating them to work in unity, it all involved a great deal of diligence. We won various inter-house competitions. Leading a contingent of 30 students in the march past event wasn't a child's play. It was through persistent efforts and days of practice that we achieved the first prize in the competition.
Organizing a Fashion Show for 12th standard farewell function was my best achievement. I learnt the significance of being behind the scenes. Who could have ever imagined that dresses could be made out of used tissue paper, newspaper, magazines, polythene and waste paper bags? Designing clothes, selecting students for modeling, getting the materials, music and lightings arranged on time, designing backdrops and assigning duties, all this was a very challenging experience. I had to use my creativity and imagination and most importantly, get work done in teams. The show was such a great success that we were given the opportunity to showcase it in front of the whole school.
All my achievements and endeavors have made me strong enough to deal with the challenges of life.
This was the prompt: Describe the highlights of your most important achievements and contributions. If you have an outstanding talent(eg. National Sportsman, run a successful business, outstanding community service) include them as well.
It is exact 300 words. Please let me know If what I have written is good enough. Any kind of grammatical errors, problems in sentence formation and structure, or anything. Please help in such way that i don't exceed the word limit. I think that I don't have a very good start. I wanted a catchy start that hooks the reader to the essay. I would be very grateful if you could help me out as soon as possible since I have to submit my application within a week. Thank you very much!
From the very beginning, I loved to be a part of every activity conducted in my school. My qualities of being a responsible and a devoted student and participation in numerous extra-curricular activities of the school, got me nominated for being the Vice Head Girl. Even though I did not get that honor, I did not lose hope. After facing the tough elections for the Student Body, I got the opportunity to be the Vice Captain of Wisdom House. In the subsequent year I was acknowledged as the Captain. It was then that I learnt to be more responsible and agile. Encouraging my house members to participate in house activities, solving their problems, enjoying every victory with them, conducting house meetings and motivating them to work in unity, it all involved a great deal of diligence. We won various inter-house competitions. Leading a contingent of 30 students in the march past event wasn't a child's play. It was through persistent efforts and days of practice that we achieved the first prize in the competition.
Organizing a Fashion Show for 12th standard farewell function was my best achievement. I learnt the significance of being behind the scenes. Who could have ever imagined that dresses could be made out of used tissue paper, newspaper, magazines, polythene and waste paper bags? Designing clothes, selecting students for modeling, getting the materials, music and lightings arranged on time, designing backdrops and assigning duties, all this was a very challenging experience. I had to use my creativity and imagination and most importantly, get work done in teams. The show was such a great success that we were given the opportunity to showcase it in front of the whole school.
All my achievements and endeavors have made me strong enough to deal with the challenges of life.
