Passion for Economics in Agriculture

Hi,
First of all, thank you for editing this essay. I think I still need some help with grammatical errors, transitions, contents in the short essay, and sentence structure. Thank you again!

Please briefly tell us why you feel UC Davis is the right place for you to continue your education. 200 Words Maximum

Growing up with a family-operated restaurant, I helped run the business while applying several strategies from the Small Business Administration and analyzing how surroundings affect the restaurant's customers and profits. I have also noticed the effects of "supply and demand" on food costs from purchasing raw goods for the restaurant with my father. While expanding the horizons of my business experiences, I have developed a passion for economics and business.

With UC Davis' world-renown Agriculture and Resource Economics program, I will be able to increase my knowledge of the allocation, production, and consumption of food, while understanding the global social injustices and issues behind them. I am also eager to implement economic concepts from the classroom to the real world by utilizing the university's study abroad programs to China and its research opportunities to conduct my own research on agricultural economics. The stand-out programs and courses at UC Davis will help me enhance my understanding of economics to my fullest potential with opportunities for me to apply them to real life. Hence, I choose UC Davis because I am confident that its strong undergraduate programs and opportunities in Agriculture and Resource Economics will help me succeed as a future economist in the agricultural industry and become a benefactor to society.

210 words total

I'm not a teacher.

Your second paragraph is strong.

However, your first has a lack of organization.

I think you should re-write it. Instead of being too specific and listing what you have learned. Talk about the opportunity you had as a result of being brought up in the family business. How being around business since your childhood has strengthened your understanding of key concepts in economics. And, how this opportunity has developed your passion for economics.

hope this helps

Let's look for some errors...

Growing up with a family-operated restaurant, I helped run the business while applying several strategies from the Small Business Administration I don't know what this means... can you be specific about the strategies?

...and analyzing how surroundings affect the restaurant's customers and profits.---excellent

Well, I agree with Jesus... it's a strong second paragraph. How about taking out this part:
While expanding the horizons of my business experiences, I have developed a passion for economics and business. If you get rid of that, you can replace it with some sentences that really express the main idea you want the reader to associated with you... the main idea you want the reader to remember.