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What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the university community?
Here is my essay:
As a young child, I was known to be an annoyance because I always asked many questions. Every time someone would explain something to me, I would respond by asking, "Why?" As I got older, I did not look for others to find the answers to my questions; I began to search for the answers myself in hopes to be able to one day pass my own knowledge to others.
This way of life progressed when I was at the age of puberty. When I hit my puberty stage, it opened my eyes to the female body and how it works. Everything from the female reproductive organs, cancers of the breasts, conceiving offspring, delivering babies, to even STDs became rather fascinating to me. Because of this, I chose to be a gynecologist/obstetrician for my career. In that career one is constantly researching, learning, and passing on knowledge to other women in hopes to treat them and better their lives. While being patient, understanding, polite, and most importantly, a great listener. All the qualities which I possess.
Also with this career must come the passion for mathematics and the sciences. With any medical field, gynecology/obstetrics requires one to take many classes of both subjects. Those subjects, for me, are very challenging. But that is the best part because there is never a dull moment with them. In fact, in high school I faithfully took both mathematics and science classes each year. Not because I was forced to, but because they are every bit as exciting to me. I will most definitely continue to pursue that path at the University of Illinois- Urbana.
Also it has to be 250 words for them. N im going to need help shortening it. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE HELP ME!!! Please and thank you!!! I really appreciate it.
What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the university community?
Here is my essay:
As a young child, I was known to be an annoyance because I always asked many questions. Every time someone would explain something to me, I would respond by asking, "Why?" As I got older, I did not look for others to find the answers to my questions; I began to search for the answers myself in hopes to be able to one day pass my own knowledge to others.
This way of life progressed when I was at the age of puberty. When I hit my puberty stage, it opened my eyes to the female body and how it works. Everything from the female reproductive organs, cancers of the breasts, conceiving offspring, delivering babies, to even STDs became rather fascinating to me. Because of this, I chose to be a gynecologist/obstetrician for my career. In that career one is constantly researching, learning, and passing on knowledge to other women in hopes to treat them and better their lives. While being patient, understanding, polite, and most importantly, a great listener. All the qualities which I possess.
Also with this career must come the passion for mathematics and the sciences. With any medical field, gynecology/obstetrics requires one to take many classes of both subjects. Those subjects, for me, are very challenging. But that is the best part because there is never a dull moment with them. In fact, in high school I faithfully took both mathematics and science classes each year. Not because I was forced to, but because they are every bit as exciting to me. I will most definitely continue to pursue that path at the University of Illinois- Urbana.
Also it has to be 250 words for them. N im going to need help shortening it. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE HELP ME!!! Please and thank you!!! I really appreciate it.
