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'a passion of studying Economics' -my personal essay one on a significant experience.



shidooh 2 / 2  
Aug 25, 2012   #1
As I paced towards the grocery lane in a mini supermarket the sight of over crowded customers met my gaze. I swiftly sliped my way through, heading to the milk section. ``Tafadhali usichukue pakiti zaidi ya tatu,`` beckoned an attendant as he approached us. (Please pick a maximum of 3 packets each). ``But why?`` I tried to inquire on behalf of everyone. ``Poleni maziwa ni chache.`` (I am sorry we are running short of milk)

On that day relatives had come to pay my family a visit and according to the African culture, a meal was to be prepared as a welcoming symbol. My mother sent me to the shops to buy 4 loaves and 6 packets of milk. Before reaching the supermarket I had gone to a total of 4 kiosks in search of both bread and milk but in return only got bread. The 3 different shopkeepers told me the same story, ``Sorry we have run out of milk.``

Buying 3 packets less of milk sparked my interest in demand and supply. I wondered why my town was experiencing such a shortage of milk yet it was the leading Agricultural produce in my country, Kenya. I even questioned myself what had happened to all that milk produced by my grandmother`s dairy cows on her farm. From what I understood, this frequent milk shortage could finally lead to limited dairy products in the Economy.

Out of this experience I have nurtured a passion of studying Economics in college. With knowledge acquired on the cycle of production and distribution of goods, I shall be of great help to my community. This is by ensuring a steady supply of commodities to meet consumers` needs. Since all factors of production are present, the only way to curb scarcity is to balance demand and supply. Therefore, the supply of sustainable basic goods to the market along the chain of production, is my main interest.

jessawesomeness 1 / 3  
Aug 26, 2012   #2
I think this could use more personality, it only says this happened and that happened, not much emotion to it. Elaborate more on your passion and tell the story in way that isnt just he said she said.
freakosaur 1 / 7  
Aug 26, 2012   #3
The beginning is really good and interesting, but you could add soooo much more in the ending. There needs to be more transition between the 3rd and 4th paragraph
riskatun 4 / 6  
Aug 29, 2012   #4
Rebecca, like you i also herald from Africa and can appreciate what you are saying. But i must agree with Patrick and Jessica on both counts. I see the problem but I don't see you. Having said this, I wrote a piece of the sort. I would appreciate it if you could make time to critique it. - "Lessons in Engineering"
emy13 2 / 4  
Sep 4, 2012   #5
I like how you explained why economics really relates to you and your history with it, but I feel like you can elaborate much more on other experiences in your life to make you seem more dynamic, I guess.


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