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Describe an unpopular opinion you have had and why you stood (or stand) by it
Sitting in a tattoo shop with a group of friends, a needle punctured a small hole through my nose. "Oh man," I thought. "My dad is going to kill me."
At 12 years old, I shyly asked my dad if I could get a nose piercing. He immediately responded, "Hell no!" My dreams were crushed, but I held hope that I would one day have the chance. Over six years later, I stepped into an Italian tattoo shop with my friends and rebelled against my father's wishes. On my flight back from Europe, my emotions were torn. I was excited I had finally pierced my nose, but I knew my dad would be less than thrilled.
As I expected, my parents were upset. Clearly disappointed, my father scolded me for scarring my "beautiful Latina skin." My stepmom, on the other hand, was more concerned for my reputation. She criticized me for wanting such a "trashy" and "slutty" object on my face. She warned me of the consequences, "You'll never be able to date a decent boy or marry a nice man. What's next? Tattoos? Please tell me no..."
Criticism came from every end of my family. Each individual had some negative remark to say. My uncle sarcastically asked me if I had a boogar on my nose and my aunt told me it looked like a zit. For my family to judge my character based on a physical attachment was incredibly disappointing. Although everyone is entitled to his or her own opinion, my family's words were purposefully hurtful.
I persistently reminded my parents that I was a good student with the best intentions, and that I had always respected their thoughts even when I did not agreed with them. Growing up, my parents constantly questioned my likes; their words ultimately swayed my decisions. I knew my choice to pierce my nose would not affect my personality and not hurt them. I began to gain confidence and told myself to not let others bring me down- including those I love the most.
I reassured them and myself that I was no longer a little girl and could make my own decisions. I was an adult now with the ability to form my own likes and dislikes, even if my family had conflicting opinions.
In light of my experience with my family's opposition, I hope to instill strong morals in my future children and raise them to respect diversity. Learning from my family's hurtful words, I plan to respect my future children's opinions even when I do not always agree with them. Inner qualities are the most important aspects of an individual, as they are permanently evolving and ever-changing.
Describe an unpopular opinion you have had and why you stood (or stand) by it
Sitting in a tattoo shop with a group of friends, a needle punctured a small hole through my nose. "Oh man," I thought. "My dad is going to kill me."
At 12 years old, I shyly asked my dad if I could get a nose piercing. He immediately responded, "Hell no!" My dreams were crushed, but I held hope that I would one day have the chance. Over six years later, I stepped into an Italian tattoo shop with my friends and rebelled against my father's wishes. On my flight back from Europe, my emotions were torn. I was excited I had finally pierced my nose, but I knew my dad would be less than thrilled.
As I expected, my parents were upset. Clearly disappointed, my father scolded me for scarring my "beautiful Latina skin." My stepmom, on the other hand, was more concerned for my reputation. She criticized me for wanting such a "trashy" and "slutty" object on my face. She warned me of the consequences, "You'll never be able to date a decent boy or marry a nice man. What's next? Tattoos? Please tell me no..."
Criticism came from every end of my family. Each individual had some negative remark to say. My uncle sarcastically asked me if I had a boogar on my nose and my aunt told me it looked like a zit. For my family to judge my character based on a physical attachment was incredibly disappointing. Although everyone is entitled to his or her own opinion, my family's words were purposefully hurtful.
I persistently reminded my parents that I was a good student with the best intentions, and that I had always respected their thoughts even when I did not agreed with them. Growing up, my parents constantly questioned my likes; their words ultimately swayed my decisions. I knew my choice to pierce my nose would not affect my personality and not hurt them. I began to gain confidence and told myself to not let others bring me down- including those I love the most.
I reassured them and myself that I was no longer a little girl and could make my own decisions. I was an adult now with the ability to form my own likes and dislikes, even if my family had conflicting opinions.
In light of my experience with my family's opposition, I hope to instill strong morals in my future children and raise them to respect diversity. Learning from my family's hurtful words, I plan to respect my future children's opinions even when I do not always agree with them. Inner qualities are the most important aspects of an individual, as they are permanently evolving and ever-changing.