This is my common application extracurricular essay. I just want to receive some feedback on it and whether or not I am heading the right way. Please comment or edit for me and I will also return the favor by editing your paper! Please and thank you!
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
My junior year, I joined a club called DECA by being introduced to it from a friend. DECA is a non-profit student organization. Also, it is an internationally known high school and college club that prepares students for careers in marketing, finance, hospitality and management. Although the club has business aspects to it, it also involves leadership and working together. In DECA, there are competitions that people do in order to move up. For people to compete in competitions, they need to pick events. At regionals, state and nationals, people are required to take two tests: product knowledge (test about the event that people selected for themselves) and an economy test. Regionals involves doing one role play (where you are given a business situation and talk about how you would improve that business). If done well at regionals, then comes state. State involves doing two role plays. The people that are selected in the top five at state go to nationals. Nationals is held in a different city every year. If a person wins at nationals, they get an award and a college scholarship. People that do a written event for Regionals are guaranteed to go to State.
I joined DECA at first because I wanted to see what it was about and what it was like. Then, I realized that a curiosity turned into something way more. It turned into a love for a club. The list of benefits that I gained from joining DECA is endless for me. My chapter advisers are extremely supportive and the fact that they are comical makes being in the club so much more fun. They are always available to me when I need help with role plays or written events. Also, I've gained many more friends since I've joined.
My position in DECA is the Vice President of Communications. As the Vice President of Communications, my responsibilities in the club are to set up events that would get the club involved, help members with role plays, get study material for the members for Regionals, State or Nationals, organize the competitions for the club, organize fundraisers, and book guest speakers.
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
My junior year, I joined a club called DECA by being introduced to it from a friend. DECA is a non-profit student organization. Also, it is an internationally known high school and college club that prepares students for careers in marketing, finance, hospitality and management. Although the club has business aspects to it, it also involves leadership and working together. In DECA, there are competitions that people do in order to move up. For people to compete in competitions, they need to pick events. At regionals, state and nationals, people are required to take two tests: product knowledge (test about the event that people selected for themselves) and an economy test. Regionals involves doing one role play (where you are given a business situation and talk about how you would improve that business). If done well at regionals, then comes state. State involves doing two role plays. The people that are selected in the top five at state go to nationals. Nationals is held in a different city every year. If a person wins at nationals, they get an award and a college scholarship. People that do a written event for Regionals are guaranteed to go to State.
I joined DECA at first because I wanted to see what it was about and what it was like. Then, I realized that a curiosity turned into something way more. It turned into a love for a club. The list of benefits that I gained from joining DECA is endless for me. My chapter advisers are extremely supportive and the fact that they are comical makes being in the club so much more fun. They are always available to me when I need help with role plays or written events. Also, I've gained many more friends since I've joined.
My position in DECA is the Vice President of Communications. As the Vice President of Communications, my responsibilities in the club are to set up events that would get the club involved, help members with role plays, get study material for the members for Regionals, State or Nationals, organize the competitions for the club, organize fundraisers, and book guest speakers.