Hi All,
This is the first draft of my essay. Any help/comments/suggestions will be appreciated. Thank you!
Prompt: Please provide a statement (appr. 250-500 words) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.â¨
As I was prepping for my highly anticipated transfer from Miami to New York City during the summer of 2008, I was fresh out of high school and eager to experience the world away from everything I had known to be true, and for the unforgettable college experience that American film and television had promised. The anxiety I felt was accompanied by an underlying sense of pride, as I became one step closer to becoming a first-generation college graduate in my family. Fast Forward to today and I find myself nowhere near the origin of my journey. I am out of school and working full time, and although I slightly digressed from what I thought was my original plan, I have learned life lessons that I missed out on while living comfortably at home with mom and dad. Fast forward to today and I find myself with new perspective and a much clearer vision of what I want my future, both academic and personal, to look like and I feel equipped to take make strides toward turning my vision into reality.
Continuing on my path towards personal and professional fulfillment, transferring to XXXX UNIVERSITY will prepare me to flourish in my future professional endeavors. Having no true sense of the exploration college life supports, I brashly selected to major in a field that I later discovered I had no interest in when I began my college career. Since then, I have developed an affinity with sociology and I want to convert it into my life's work with the resources and programs offered at XXXX UNIVERSITY. I am now ready to become an active contributor of an academic community because I have a better understanding of who I want to become, what I know, and where I want to go.
Looking back at my summer in 2008 and the events that have led up to where I am now, I realized that I was not prepared to simultaneously manage my life and devote the seriousness that was, and is required to succeed academically. Not knowing how to seek support, I let myself drown in unfamiliar waters but with XXXX UNIVERSITY's dedicated staff and personal setting I will know where to find help. In addition, the core curriculum, variety of majors, and study abroad options offered at XXXX UNIVERSITY will give me the tools I need to ensure a promising future for myself. My time spent at XXXX UNIVERSITY will be a stepping-stone that will help me get to law school where I will continue to pursue my interests and above all, help others by living the life I will design for myself.
In summation, by entering a new positive environment that will support the direction I intend to lead my life in. I hope to discover new strengths and talents I didn't know I had and strengthen my ....still working on my conclusion
This is the first draft of my essay. Any help/comments/suggestions will be appreciated. Thank you!
Prompt: Please provide a statement (appr. 250-500 words) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.â¨
As I was prepping for my highly anticipated transfer from Miami to New York City during the summer of 2008, I was fresh out of high school and eager to experience the world away from everything I had known to be true, and for the unforgettable college experience that American film and television had promised. The anxiety I felt was accompanied by an underlying sense of pride, as I became one step closer to becoming a first-generation college graduate in my family. Fast Forward to today and I find myself nowhere near the origin of my journey. I am out of school and working full time, and although I slightly digressed from what I thought was my original plan, I have learned life lessons that I missed out on while living comfortably at home with mom and dad. Fast forward to today and I find myself with new perspective and a much clearer vision of what I want my future, both academic and personal, to look like and I feel equipped to take make strides toward turning my vision into reality.
Continuing on my path towards personal and professional fulfillment, transferring to XXXX UNIVERSITY will prepare me to flourish in my future professional endeavors. Having no true sense of the exploration college life supports, I brashly selected to major in a field that I later discovered I had no interest in when I began my college career. Since then, I have developed an affinity with sociology and I want to convert it into my life's work with the resources and programs offered at XXXX UNIVERSITY. I am now ready to become an active contributor of an academic community because I have a better understanding of who I want to become, what I know, and where I want to go.
Looking back at my summer in 2008 and the events that have led up to where I am now, I realized that I was not prepared to simultaneously manage my life and devote the seriousness that was, and is required to succeed academically. Not knowing how to seek support, I let myself drown in unfamiliar waters but with XXXX UNIVERSITY's dedicated staff and personal setting I will know where to find help. In addition, the core curriculum, variety of majors, and study abroad options offered at XXXX UNIVERSITY will give me the tools I need to ensure a promising future for myself. My time spent at XXXX UNIVERSITY will be a stepping-stone that will help me get to law school where I will continue to pursue my interests and above all, help others by living the life I will design for myself.
In summation, by entering a new positive environment that will support the direction I intend to lead my life in. I hope to discover new strengths and talents I didn't know I had and strengthen my ....still working on my conclusion