Hey, I'm applying for Aeronautical engineering at Purdue University, and would like some feedback on my essay.
I hope it answers the question. If it does, should the paragraph about physics and such be cancelled? Should course names be capitalized? Thanks.
Prompt: Describe how a Purdue education will help you achieve your personal and/or professional goals.
Aeronautics has always been my main field of interest; how aircrafts are designed, how the engines are manufactured and implemented with the utmost precision, how the wings are shaped and why they are as such and finally how the many, miniature features of an aircraft we do not care for allow it to lift off the ground and maintain altitude. Even the mere sound of the engines is fascinating to me.
My interests began to expand after my first flight, when the entire world of aeronautics was alien to me. The initial take off was frightening and the sound of the engines roaring mid-air was deafening, but after a while everything became normal. In the air the plane experienced minor turbulence, which is like an "air bump"; however, I did not know that, and it terrified me. Amidst all these events, the landing remains the most unforgettable part of the flight; the rumbling of the cabin as the plane touched the ground at a high speed, the sound of the engines being strained and the rush of adrenaline were all incredible.
In my childhood I did many things that further reinforced my interest in aeroplanes and aeronautics. I had visited many air shows, where several planes would fly at high velocities and perform agile manoeuvres with seemingly effortless ease; I was indeed fascinated by the pilots' flying skills, but also by the jet's structure and design, its body and hull and questioned how it had the capability of being agile, or rather what caused it to be agile and manoeuvrable. In my free time I used to play with remote controlled planes and sometimes attempt to build my own, but I lacked the sufficient knowledge to make the various electrical components work, and ultimately allow the model plane to fly.
Academically, Physics and Mathematics are two of my most favourable subjects, mainly because they intrigue me. Everything around us functions because of our fundamental understanding of Physics, from simple doors, to machines as simple as printers, to complex structures such as aeroplanes and space crafts. Any field of study is bound to include Mathematics or Physics at some point.
With the advancement of technology, newer and more efficient air craft and engine designs are being produced, and a robust university education is vital for any person planning on becoming an aeronautical engineer. I believe that Purdue University is superior and renowned; an outstanding aeronautical engineering program and a breath-taking location makes it the ideal place to study at. I hope Purdue University will allow me to pursue my interests in a calm, but stimulating environment, and arm me with the necessary tools to face an ever changing world.
I hope it answers the question. If it does, should the paragraph about physics and such be cancelled? Should course names be capitalized? Thanks.
Prompt: Describe how a Purdue education will help you achieve your personal and/or professional goals.
Aeronautics has always been my main field of interest; how aircrafts are designed, how the engines are manufactured and implemented with the utmost precision, how the wings are shaped and why they are as such and finally how the many, miniature features of an aircraft we do not care for allow it to lift off the ground and maintain altitude. Even the mere sound of the engines is fascinating to me.
My interests began to expand after my first flight, when the entire world of aeronautics was alien to me. The initial take off was frightening and the sound of the engines roaring mid-air was deafening, but after a while everything became normal. In the air the plane experienced minor turbulence, which is like an "air bump"; however, I did not know that, and it terrified me. Amidst all these events, the landing remains the most unforgettable part of the flight; the rumbling of the cabin as the plane touched the ground at a high speed, the sound of the engines being strained and the rush of adrenaline were all incredible.
In my childhood I did many things that further reinforced my interest in aeroplanes and aeronautics. I had visited many air shows, where several planes would fly at high velocities and perform agile manoeuvres with seemingly effortless ease; I was indeed fascinated by the pilots' flying skills, but also by the jet's structure and design, its body and hull and questioned how it had the capability of being agile, or rather what caused it to be agile and manoeuvrable. In my free time I used to play with remote controlled planes and sometimes attempt to build my own, but I lacked the sufficient knowledge to make the various electrical components work, and ultimately allow the model plane to fly.
Academically, Physics and Mathematics are two of my most favourable subjects, mainly because they intrigue me. Everything around us functions because of our fundamental understanding of Physics, from simple doors, to machines as simple as printers, to complex structures such as aeroplanes and space crafts. Any field of study is bound to include Mathematics or Physics at some point.
With the advancement of technology, newer and more efficient air craft and engine designs are being produced, and a robust university education is vital for any person planning on becoming an aeronautical engineer. I believe that Purdue University is superior and renowned; an outstanding aeronautical engineering program and a breath-taking location makes it the ideal place to study at. I hope Purdue University will allow me to pursue my interests in a calm, but stimulating environment, and arm me with the necessary tools to face an ever changing world.
