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Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs,school,community,city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?(*) (200-250 words)
Mr. Lemei has been one of the biggest influences on the way I think and learn. He is my favorite teacher and one of the most kind, interesting people I have ever known.
Even the driest topics of AP Physics sprung to life as Mr. Lemei lectured about them. To be fair, I had maintained a strong interest in physics before enrolling in his course, but the theories and ideas he talked about fascinated me profoundly. Quantum mechanics stood out the most among the topics covered in class, so much as to spur me to study the field independently. As I continued gorging my head with knowledge, I would often visit Mr. Lemei and flood him with questions. What is the minimum observation required for a wave function to collapse? When do you think there will be a breakthrough in quantum computing? Can I get a job in quantum computing? Never falling back on his patience, Mr. Lemei answered all of my questions and was even so kind as to lend me two of his own books on quantum theory.
Reflecting on my experiences with Mr. Lemei, I now realize that he gave me much more than an excited curiosity about physics. I feel that the resources Mr. Lemei provided for me and his profound knowledge encouraged me to further my studies on the whole. He made me understand that, no matter what I study and college and whatever profession I end up in, I can transcend those limitations to knowledge by educating myself on anything.
Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs,school,community,city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?(*) (200-250 words)
Mr. Lemei has been one of the biggest influences on the way I think and learn. He is my favorite teacher and one of the most kind, interesting people I have ever known.
Even the driest topics of AP Physics sprung to life as Mr. Lemei lectured about them. To be fair, I had maintained a strong interest in physics before enrolling in his course, but the theories and ideas he talked about fascinated me profoundly. Quantum mechanics stood out the most among the topics covered in class, so much as to spur me to study the field independently. As I continued gorging my head with knowledge, I would often visit Mr. Lemei and flood him with questions. What is the minimum observation required for a wave function to collapse? When do you think there will be a breakthrough in quantum computing? Can I get a job in quantum computing? Never falling back on his patience, Mr. Lemei answered all of my questions and was even so kind as to lend me two of his own books on quantum theory.
Reflecting on my experiences with Mr. Lemei, I now realize that he gave me much more than an excited curiosity about physics. I feel that the resources Mr. Lemei provided for me and his profound knowledge encouraged me to further my studies on the whole. He made me understand that, no matter what I study and college and whatever profession I end up in, I can transcend those limitations to knowledge by educating myself on anything.
