I would very much appreciate any advice. I'm sure this essay could still use some fine tuning. As is, it is roughly 300 words. Thanks!
In an essay of 300 words or less, please discuss your academic interests and/or professional goals.
"Since getting a computer for my sixteenth birthday, I have been drawn to learning. Every morning I would rush to the computer to check the Yahoo News and read the latest articles. A tingle would run down my spine when I would come upon an article about space or a new piece of insight into "the unknown." As time went on, I naturally became more active in the quest to quench my thirst for knowledge. Consequently, since Philosophy deals with learning how to learn, reason, and ask yourself important questions, I came to the conclusion that we would be a perfect match.
This year in my Psychology class, we delved into what is now my absolute favorite topic, the human brain. As we learned about all of the intricate systems involved in making the brain function, I immediately became intrigued. Several documentaries and a few internet articles later, I was beginning to really understand how the brain works with the human body. I found it fascinating that even the slightest damage to the brain, and the nervous system that it works so closely with, could turn a persons life upside down.
I had finally realized what I wanted to pursue as a career. I wanted to work in medicine, more specifically, I wanted to be a Neurosurgeon. What better way to learn about the brain than to have a job where I work with it hands on. Not only do I get to work with the brain, but I can help people while I am doing it. My dream: forever working in the rapidly changing field of science and changing lives doing it. My education will be a long and bumpy road, but I would like nothing more than to start this journey at the University of Illinois."