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my red school blazer - MIT CHALLENGE ESSAY



quanny 9 / 36  
Dec 31, 2013   #1
I am not sure if this can be called as a challenge. Any comment is greatly appreciated! Does this sound very presumptuous or rude?

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

Mr.X has never failed to top the list of "gruesome teachers" over the years.

So when I received his exclusive email for my craved USA school trip, I was in agony.

Trudging my feet into his dingy office, I prayed.

"What's the trouble?" He snorted.

As I stuttered that I wanted to go for the science fair I previously signed up and it clashed with the trip, his eyes rolled into two freshly-peeled eggs.

"You think your project is good? You don't have a chance to get anything from the fair." He stormed away, leaving me dejected.

For years, our school has not won anything. Other elite institutions sweep everything. When the trip people enjoyed their holiday, I spent my days in lab and library, thinking about how everyone might laugh at me. But that doesn't matter. I believe in my own efforts. And the lonesome Indian doctorate student in lab was happy to have me. I cleaned up the clutter and brought her Chai. In return, she taught me how to clean my latex glove smell and cleared my doubts on theories. The swelling sense of satisfaction of scrapping the precipitated drugs off, the peculiar shapes of the crystals under the microscope, and the knowledge I have gained are invaluable.

Months later, my red school blazer made me so obvious among the dozen of indigo and brown Gold recipients, and I felt proud.

When I spotted Mr.X cheering for me, I beamed at him. Thanks for the teasing.

xxnina22796xx 3 / 4  
Dec 31, 2013   #2
"You think your project is good? You don't have the slightest chance of winning at the fair."
"For years, our school has failed to place among the elite institutions."
Or something along those lines. I feel that using "get anything" and "won anything" so closely is repetitive.
OP quanny 9 / 36  
Dec 31, 2013   #3
xxnina22796xx
thx for ur advice!


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