(name of college) accepted me and also gave me financial aids. But, Since the financial aids that it provided was low enough for me to afford my education at this college, I am writing this letter to mention my decision of not being able to accept the admission offer of this college.
Please help me with the letter below. Grammers, sentence structures,....etc
I greatly appreciate your help.
Dear madam,
I am writing this e-mail to inform you that unfortunately I wont be able to accept the offer provided by (name of college) to me
I would like to thank (name of college) for the help and support it provided to me during my whole application process. Among the different colleges and universities that I applied to for the fall 2009 intake admission consideration, (name of college) was the first college that accepted me and gave me the opportunity to fulfill my higher goals.
I received the acceptance letter of (name of college) after I had received 3 rejection letters from other colleges. After receiving 3 rejections, I began thinking negatively about myself and my potential. My hopes started fading away. But, when all of a sudden I received an acceptance letter from (name of college), those lost hopes were regained and I started feeling confident about myself.
Unwantingly, I had to turn down the offer from (name of college) because after a careful analysis, I found out that I wouldnt be able to afford my education at this college
Meanwhile, Some colleges to which I had applied earier have also been providing better scholarships to me.
The generous financial aid that (name of college) provided me will definately help other deserving students afford their education at this great institution.
Please accept the statement of intention to enroll form which I have sent to (name of college) through mail and may take some time to reach there.
Thank you
Sincerely
__________
NOTE:(name of college) signifies the same college
Please help me with the letter below. Grammers, sentence structures,....etc
I greatly appreciate your help.
Dear madam,
I am writing this e-mail to inform you that unfortunately I wont be able to accept the offer provided by (name of college) to me
I would like to thank (name of college) for the help and support it provided to me during my whole application process. Among the different colleges and universities that I applied to for the fall 2009 intake admission consideration, (name of college) was the first college that accepted me and gave me the opportunity to fulfill my higher goals.
I received the acceptance letter of (name of college) after I had received 3 rejection letters from other colleges. After receiving 3 rejections, I began thinking negatively about myself and my potential. My hopes started fading away. But, when all of a sudden I received an acceptance letter from (name of college), those lost hopes were regained and I started feeling confident about myself.
Unwantingly, I had to turn down the offer from (name of college) because after a careful analysis, I found out that I wouldnt be able to afford my education at this college
Meanwhile, Some colleges to which I had applied earier have also been providing better scholarships to me.
The generous financial aid that (name of college) provided me will definately help other deserving students afford their education at this great institution.
Please accept the statement of intention to enroll form which I have sent to (name of college) through mail and may take some time to reach there.
Thank you
Sincerely
__________
NOTE:(name of college) signifies the same college