Rice Supplement - what motivated you to come to Rice?

What motivated you to apply to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words.

There is no "what if" that cannot become "what is." After reading those few words about Rice University, I only became more motivated into considering the institution as the gateway to my next four years of quality intellect and wisdom.

As I continued to research the opportunities that Rice had to offer, the majority of the elements that I discovered about the university turned out as positive. Imagining myself attending the small student to faculty institution, I feel closer to home. Having attended a high school with small class sizes, I feel I will not only comfortably blend myself into the familiar setting but also have the opportunity to partake in intellectual and thought-provoking discussions. Furthermore, Rice's prestigious Pre-Med program only makes more believe that my dreams of becoming the best doctor that I can be can turn into a reality by receiving an immense and adequate education from the university.

please help me if i didn't answer the prompt correctly or with grammatical errors. much is appreciated.

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...I only became more motivated into considering the institution as the gateway to my next four years of quality intellect and wisdom. Maybe you should change these words to 'education' and '?' Because hopefully, your intellect and wisdom will last more than four years!

Furthermore, Rice's prestigious Pre-Med program only reinforces my belief that my dreams of becoming...

thanks so much for your help, I really do appreciate it!

I think your essay is fine...
But on my first draft, I also tried to use the quote "What if" and "What is"
and my writing teacher said that there may be tons of people out there who will
use the quote and that to sound more unique, i should not be using quotes directly
from their web...