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"Satisfied"/ Courage to ask for more ; UVA - "favorite word"



alexzxz 1 / 6  
Dec 27, 2012   #1
This is the supplement for University of Virginia's "What is your favorite word and Why" supplement. However, I feel that i could potentially use it for the Common App Essay instead.

Comments and criticism welcomed. Ideas on possible expansion welcomed as well.

I can still remember that one dinner where I first understood the meaning of the word "satisfied". At that time, we had just finished a sumptuous meal of barbequed spare ribs, bok choy, and green beans when I uttered the words "I'm satisfied" in my parents' native Cantonese. Shocked, both immediately chastised me for saying such. Upon my confusion, they explained: the proper usage was "I'm full", whereas "I'm satisfied" hinted that I had just finished my last meal on Earth. It was my turn to be shocked. My parents were usually more rationale and pragmatic than this: after all, my father had been a judge back in Taishan, China whereas my mom worked several jobs just to support her large family. Although I had been raised with their no-nonsense attitude, sometimes I'd be surprised by examples of their cultural misconceptions. Being the self-righteous, American-born-and-educated youth that I was, I easily joked back that they were being superstitious, yet I just couldn't deny their logic.

My parents were right in a sense: being "satisfied" is the end of the line. Growing up among a community of mostly immigrants and first generation Chinese, I encountered plenty of folks who were clearly dissatisfied by their station in life, stuck in low-paying manual labor jobs. Yet, despite their complaints, most had never tried to advance their prospects through courses/job training, instead abiding day to day life. From that I understood that, while most were unhappy with what they got, they were, in fact, "satisfied" in the sense that they were OK with living an unhappy life. They epitomized Henry David Thoreau's quote, "the mass of men live lives of quiet desperation". Although my parents had perceived the phrase "satisfied" for its ominous meaning, I formed my own meaning for a lifelong philosophy.

Personally, being satisfied meant that you were fine with how things stood, that you were OK with the status quo. While many might consider that to be humble and unselfish, I always saw that as a sign of weakness of those who didn't have the will or courage to ask for more. After all, where would we be if our ancestors were satisfied eating raw, uncooked meat? Where would we be if Columbus never questioned the possibility of a western route to India? Where would I be if my brethren had not fought to tear down the racial discrimination of the Chinese Exclusion Act?

To me, being "satisfied" meant giving up on progress and change. A society that was "satisfied" was stagnant and doomed to die. Until the day I die, I'll never be "satisfied", so that I will always strive for more, for better.

Allenduncare 1 / 1  
Dec 27, 2012   #2
This supplement does not directly answer the question. Rather it indirectly answers it, but gives no definite reason. It seems as though the question you are answering is what does the word satisfied mean to you rather than what is your favorite word
OP alexzxz 1 / 6  
Dec 31, 2012   #3
bump
if you revise mine, I'll gladly return the favor.
jhakyung195 2 / 4  
Dec 31, 2012   #4
alexzxz

I can still remember that one dinner where I first understood the meaning of the word "satisfied". "That one dinner where" I don't know why but it rubs me the wrong way...that one dinner when? At that time, we had just finished a sumptuous meal of barbequed should be barbecued

My parents were right in a sense: being "satisfied" is the end of the line. Growing up among a community of mostly immigrants and first generation Chinese, I encountered plenty of folks who were clearly dissatisfied by their stations in life, stuck in low-paying manual labor jobs. Yet, despite their complaints, most had never tried to advance their prospects through courses/job training, insteada comma here perhaps? if you reread this sentence all the way, it is a bit confusing at first. write it like you would say it abiding day to day life. From that I understood thatdelete that , while most were unhappy with what they got, they were, in fact, "satisfied" in the sense that they were OK with living an unhappy life. the "in fact" and "in the sense" seem to be a bit redundant. I think you coud shorten this sentence a bit. Readers will understand what you are trying to get at They epitomized Henry David Thoreau's quote, "the mass of men live lives of quiet desperation" love this quote :) . Although my parents had perceived the phrase "satisfied" for its ominous meaning, I formed my own meaning for a lifelong philosophy.

Personally, being satisfied meant that you were fine with how things stood, that you were OK with the status quo. While many you use "many" and "most" quite a bit. Better variety of verbs! might consider that what is that? t to be humble and unselfish, I always saw that again, what is that? as a sign of weakness of those who didn't have the will or courage to ask for more. After all, where would we be if our ancestors were satisfied eating raw, uncooked meat? Where would we be if Columbus never questioned the possibility of a western route to India? Where would I be if my brethren had not fought to tear down the racial discrimination of the Chinese Exclusion Act?

To me, being "satisfied" meant giving up on progress and change. A society that was "satisfied" was stagnant and doomed to die. Until the day I die, I'll never be "satisfied", so that I will always strive for more, for better. "so that" is not necessary if you are using "will" twice. Maybe add a semicolon after satisfied. treat it like two sentences

I really liked your essay! It was well-written and quite insightful. Made me rethink some points of my own philosophy. Just a few tweaks here and there is all that it needs!
kukaxu 1 / 9  
Dec 31, 2012   #5
you might want to reconsider some of the verb tenses. other than that great essay definitely tells who you are :)
would you please read mine ? :)


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