I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station/ Common App; Extracurricular Activity

yisha 6 / 21

Dec 6, 2012 #1

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)

Hope you can point out the grammar mistakes and anywhere awkward.
And did I state my experience clearly? Enough Details? Did I explain how the experience promoted me?

I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station hosting the programme about the new discoveries in science and technology field.The lunch hour when I shared the latest discoveries with the whole school was really an exciting moment.Moreover,I broadcast in many school activities such as the school sport meeting and the swimming games.As an officer of the school broadcasting station,I also participatezd in organizing the school singing contest.Although I met many unexpected difficulties when arranging the show list and the venue,these barriers did not stop me from organizing an amazing contest,and even made me stronger.The broadcasting work shaped me an outgoing and confident girl.Most importantly,the painstaking endeavors cultivated my capabilities not only in broadcasting but also in the leadership and organizing ability.Now I have new DJs take over the programme,but the memory as a DJ will inspire me to promote and challenge myself for my whole life.

dumi 1 / 6793

Dec 6, 2012 #2

I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station hosting the programme about the new discoveries in science and technology field.The lunch hour when I shared the latest discoveries with the whole school was really an exciting moment

I guess you can combine these two ideas and come up with a more catchy opening statement ; )
I remember the exciting lunch hours during which I shared latest discoveries in science and technology with the whole school as a DJ in the school broadcasting station.

Moreover,I broadcast in many school activities such as the school sport meeting and the swimming games.As an officer of the school broadcasting station,I also participatezd in organizing the school singing contest

My programmes also were extended to cover sports events. I also took a lead role in organizing the school singing contest which was organized by the shcool broadcasting station.

yara 3 / 4

Dec 8, 2012 #3

"I also participatezd"
it's spelt participated, I like it but I think you should elaborate more, they have given you 1000 words space, just my opinion.
good luck!