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'searching for my dream' - U Michigan Supp


ellecc 4 / 12  
Aug 24, 2012   #1
Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School (including preferred admission and dual degree programs) to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)

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Opportunities! I want more opportunities!

I wanted to be a policewoman to punish the bad guys when I was a little girl; I wished to be an intelligent teacher when I was in primary school. I had a lot of "dreams", yet when I grew older, all of them vanished. So I started searching for my dream.

With many years of effort, I still have not come up with an answer. I love studying physics and it is fun to learn biology. When I was preparing for AP Economics exams, I started to take interest in how to make the best decision to distribute resources and allocate my time. I thought psychology was all about reading people's mind, yet when I opened Psychology of David G. Myers, a different world was in front of me. I have no idea what is "engineering", and whether I will like anthropology or not. With so many fields out there I have never stepped on, how can I say what I want to do? That will be too immature for me!

Life comes with millions of marvelous possibilities, and I need more opportunities to find them. And The LSA Plan is just there to provide me with those opportunities. I will be able to learn so many skills and have different experiences. How wonderful will that be to study at College of Literature, Science and the Arts in the University of Michigan!

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Feel free to criticize! And please help me with my grammar mistakes..
Paalexander 2 / 9  
Aug 24, 2012   #2
You say that you've explored many topics yet you are undecided. You also mention their lSA plan which is great. However, I feel you need to expand on why u of m is particularly for you. I could use this essay for Syracuse university. So just think about what they offer in psychology that might make you want to explore that area, or what they offer in terms of biology.
emy13 2 / 4  
Sep 8, 2012   #3
And The LSA Plan is just there to provide me with those opportunities.
You may want to omit the "And" and replace it with something like "Fortunately" or "Luckily" followed by a comma. Also, if you decide to do that, you would want to get rid of the "just" as well.

How wonderful will that be to study at College of Literature, Science and the Arts in the University of Michigan!
I would replace the "will that" with "would it" and the "in" with "at".


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