How is the grammar and over all effect? What else can i change? (Will it be a major plus point in my application?) Any comments appreciated.
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The College of Agriculture and Life Sciences (CALS) develops leaders committed to the improvement of life. Describe how your interest and related experiences have influenced your selection of major and how CALS will prepare you to be a leader in your chosen field. - 500 words
With Ivy league status, forty noble laureates, pioneers in many fields of study, and number one ranking in numerous studies, why would Cornell not be the first choice of any young and aspiring student? However, these are all very superficial reasons reasons for any application. The mechanisms that underlie Cornell's superior ranking and status is what make the significant difference.
With its large and international community, Cornell allows for strong connections and bonds. My international experience through traveling and also as a "third culture kid," an Indian living in Hungary having been to American and British international schools, has enabled me to respect, understand, and connect with people from different backgrounds. It is an important leadership quality that can be nurtured through multi-cultural education that is provided by Cornell University and therefore in its College of Agriculture and Life Sciences. I believe it to also be a an essential trait in business and to be successful in the world as a whole.
I have been interested in business from a very young age. My greatest inspiration has been my father and the vicarious experiences I have had through him. He cultivated my interest - answering questions and teaching me from his experience. He continues to involve me in many of his activities and avidly seeks my opinions - which he surprisingly finds very useful - in his ventures. Additionally, In my IB Economics class we were given a flavor of the corporate world when we were allowed to create our own businesses. We were involved with the marketing, financing, accounting, management, and even production. It was a a very exciting experience. Despite setbacks that we faced we were still able to proceed as a result of patience and clear-thinking. My internship at MoveOne Relocations added to my interest in business, however, the business project was our own complete creation which made it a more realistic experience. What I find most interesting in business is the variety of fields within the subject itself as well as the international experience achieved from it.
CALS's applied economics and management program gives the chance to build a well-rounded education and allows for exploration in all the areas of business. The double major program also interests me, because I am keen on learning computer science. Technology is greatly developing, and I foresee it becoming increasingly integrated and effectual in business. It will provide more productive and efficient methods that may help in the future of developing countries such as India. India's and China's fast growing economy have not only greatly affected the corporate world but also the environment. Through more efficient technology and fuels, the countries can continue with sustainable growth as well as maintain a healthy environment.
CASL will help me become a leader by giving me the ability to communicate and work together international students to help solve global problems and issues (especially that of poverty in Africa and Asia) through the education I will receive in applied economics and management collaborated with computer science.
Thank You!
The College of Agriculture and Life Sciences (CALS) develops leaders committed to the improvement of life. Describe how your interest and related experiences have influenced your selection of major and how CALS will prepare you to be a leader in your chosen field. - 500 words
With Ivy league status, forty noble laureates, pioneers in many fields of study, and number one ranking in numerous studies, why would Cornell not be the first choice of any young and aspiring student? However, these are all very superficial reasons reasons for any application. The mechanisms that underlie Cornell's superior ranking and status is what make the significant difference.
With its large and international community, Cornell allows for strong connections and bonds. My international experience through traveling and also as a "third culture kid," an Indian living in Hungary having been to American and British international schools, has enabled me to respect, understand, and connect with people from different backgrounds. It is an important leadership quality that can be nurtured through multi-cultural education that is provided by Cornell University and therefore in its College of Agriculture and Life Sciences. I believe it to also be a an essential trait in business and to be successful in the world as a whole.
I have been interested in business from a very young age. My greatest inspiration has been my father and the vicarious experiences I have had through him. He cultivated my interest - answering questions and teaching me from his experience. He continues to involve me in many of his activities and avidly seeks my opinions - which he surprisingly finds very useful - in his ventures. Additionally, In my IB Economics class we were given a flavor of the corporate world when we were allowed to create our own businesses. We were involved with the marketing, financing, accounting, management, and even production. It was a a very exciting experience. Despite setbacks that we faced we were still able to proceed as a result of patience and clear-thinking. My internship at MoveOne Relocations added to my interest in business, however, the business project was our own complete creation which made it a more realistic experience. What I find most interesting in business is the variety of fields within the subject itself as well as the international experience achieved from it.
CALS's applied economics and management program gives the chance to build a well-rounded education and allows for exploration in all the areas of business. The double major program also interests me, because I am keen on learning computer science. Technology is greatly developing, and I foresee it becoming increasingly integrated and effectual in business. It will provide more productive and efficient methods that may help in the future of developing countries such as India. India's and China's fast growing economy have not only greatly affected the corporate world but also the environment. Through more efficient technology and fuels, the countries can continue with sustainable growth as well as maintain a healthy environment.
CASL will help me become a leader by giving me the ability to communicate and work together international students to help solve global problems and issues (especially that of poverty in Africa and Asia) through the education I will receive in applied economics and management collaborated with computer science.
