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Shy and awkward - UBC: Tell us about yourself



s_enav 1 / 1  
Dec 8, 2024   #1
Question 1: Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (Max: 1500 characters)

As someone who is slow to warm up, those who don't know me well often describe me as shy and awkward. However, when people have the opportunity to learn more about me, they will discover the caring and enthusiastic side of me, as my close friends describe. Grade 10 was a great year for me, as it was my third year in the school, and I knew most of my classmates. With familiar faces throughout the school, I was more comfortable and confident in expressing myself. That year, I engaged in many school activities, being the vice president of the student council and leader of the yearbook club. However, grade 11 posed a new challenge, as I had to move from my old home in B.C. to Alberta. Before the move, I had always disliked entering a new environment, as it meant starting everything over again. Fortunately, I am someone who finds joy in challenges. In attempting to relive my successful grade 10 year, I constantly pushed myself out of my comfort zone in grade 11 by actively seeking new friends and clubs to join at my new school. Now, in grade 12, I serve as a leader in the leadership club of my school, and it has by far been the achievement that I'm the proudest of. The pride does not come from the position itself, but from how it represents my growth from the journey of overcoming my fear of leaving my comfort zone, rebuilding my confidence, and not allowing my achievements from the past to overshadow my present. (1431 characters)

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15458  
Dec 9, 2024   #2
You are talking about yourself with an assumption of what others might be thinking of you. The actual discussion needs to reference your character and traits from an exterior point of view. That means, you should be speaking of how others truly see you by referencing them properly in the essay and delivering an understanding that you interviewed these people for the statement presentation. You can revise the essay to actually focus on how you are viewed as a child of the family, a classmate, and a community member. You are not properly focusing your response in the presentation. You are discussing only one aspect instead of several community memberships. You are immediately discussing what you are proud of, which should only come after all your character considerations have been presented.
OP s_enav 1 / 1  
Dec 11, 2024   #3
@Holt Thank you so much for your help! I really appreciate it!


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