Most significant challenge: rebuilding my self-esteem after losing a love for a sport - UC prompt

5) Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

General Answer:The most significant challenge was rebuilding self-esteem after losing a love for a sport.

"I quit."
I announce to my "coaches" as I painfully step away from the sport I once loved so dearly. I feel a sense of relief entwined with the misery of my crumbling self-esteem and a burning sensation of madness rising within.
I've tried my best to avoid exclusion throughout my life. Like the many experiences regarding exclusion, high school sports were no exception.
But nothing could've prepared me for the worst.
Within three emotionally painful months of serious dedication and commitment to flag football, I observed how my consistent efforts went to waste. From past trauma to intensifying cries after every practice, there stood a toxic environment of team members and two coaches who failed to adhere to the most standard expectations of a mentor, implementing extreme favoritism and craving the desire to win.
To say this challenge of redeeming my self-worth shattered me would be an understatement. Unforgettable, moving through this struggle altered and shaped me tremendously as a student. Trapped in such a horrible mental state, I felt disheartened that displayed before me were countless emails written to teachers requesting extensions, dissatisfaction with current grades, and pleadings to be heard. After all, it was never an option to disappoint those around me with drastic academic failures. As for myself, the constant fear of failing held me intact.
Yet, alongside this fear came motivation-a strong desire to succeed despite the emotional wounds that scattered the mind of a straight-A student.
Today, I'm fortunate to say that despite ongoing traumatic mental health challenges, I remain a thriving student, striving to forbid anyone from being in that situation.
Through this challenge, I forever doubted my ability to restore my long-lost self-worth. But now, I'm doing so. With time, self-determination, and a blossoming love for a new sport and community, I'm starting to realize how moving past ugly pieces of past challenges allows me to discover new passions and beautiful moments in parts of life, motivating me to be the best version of myself daily. With these battle scars, I wish to inspire and impact people in my community every day.

I think the response will be better written if you add a back story at the beginning. Why did you love flag football? What sense of fulfillment did you get from it? What were your grades like when you still enjoyed the game and it contributed to your academic accomplishments? Show a slow spiral from love to dislike. When you directly say you quit the game because of certain situations, you leave the reviewer with more questions than answers. This is a written interview so you have to make sure that your response is complete and offers a clear understanding of how reached the end result. You have to understand that the reviewer needs to be able to imagine what you were going through. Do not soft soap it too much. Being real is important in these essays,

@fififlower373
- begin by describing your initial love for flag football
- share the sense of fulfillment it gave you and how it positively impacted your academic
- narrate the gradual change from enjoyment to disinterest
- avoid abruptly stating you quit; instead, illustrate a progression that explains why