but it will always give me something to enhance for.
I seemed as if I were to be a person who could fit in,
<try rephrasing these two. What do you mean I seemed as if...?
Whether it's to run my own business or work with animals.
incomplete thought. combine? it with the previous sentence.
My beliefs still remain the same,
Being open-minded and being the same... do they work together? I guess they could, if you were open minded to begin with, but you say you have become more so. that last part of the sentence, open minded to see other * points of view in addition to my own. You have an incomplete thought there with "giving..."
You lower-cased Christian...
About this, what is the "other side"? I understand the "who am I" part of the prompt, or so I think I do. However, I don't get the flow of ideas from you tried to fit in, then you now "walk the walk." I assume you are talking about your Christian walk, but I really can not say...
I'm getting several different vibes from this paragraph. You tried to fit in. That did not work. You became a Christian. Your views changed. You now live life going through new experiences. Your spiritual life is about goals? > running a business? Being open minded, yet keeping the same beliefs. I am truly puzzled.
Try to outline how Christianity has really affected your life. Then put it together as a coherent work about yourself. (did you answer the prompt?)