uc prompt #1. descibe the world you come from for example your family,community or school and tell us how your world has helped shape your dreams and aspiration.
The world that I come from is a world of poverty, people constantly struggling to make ends meet. Mothers are leaving the house at 5.00am to go the farm to make sure that her kids have at least one square meal. Fathers are going fishing and hunting to give his family a feast. Children are playing outside with no clothes on because their parents cannot afford to clothe them. Families are mourning almost every year because the lost a loved one to an indescribable disease .A ten year is old taking care of his younger siblings because his parents were victims of HIV/AIDS. Forcing him to become an adult when he is just a kid. For the first fifteen years of my life I lived in Nigeria, a country in Africa. I saw people languishing in pain not certain if they will make it till the next day. For example people who were homeless and lived on the street despite of the weather condition. Whenever I saw this it broke my heart. I felt sad because there were people who actually lived in conditions like that. Seeing those living conditions and the constant struggle made me stronger. It made me appreciate and be self-content with what I have. I learned to cherish whatever I had and not take things for granted. The experience also made me very determined and willing to go hard in whatever I do. I became driven to well in my academics in order to achieve my dream of becoming a nurse. I want to become a nurse so that I can help the less privileged, especially the people in Africa who have no one to turn to when the going gets tough. Knowing what I wanted my career to be right from childhood made me want to come to the United States of America. I felt that I was going to get a better education and more exposure in my field of study if I came to the United States. My motivation to reach my goal kept me from slacking off from my studies. Another inspiration that kept me from slacking off was my dad. My dad is a very hardworking man who can go to the extreme to get whatever he puts his mind to. He works so many hours in a day just to make sure that his family is comfortable and does not lack anything. That is his number one goal and he can do anything just to make it happen. He always tells me "to be my own person and not depend on anybody for anything". Those words inspire me everyday and keeps me from slacking off from my studies and my priority. Being around him and seeing how determined and hardworking he is makes me strive harder to achieve my goal in life. I know that I have to be independent young lady in order to be as successful as he is.
please tell me anything you see that is wrong whether grammar or whatever. thank you in advance.
The world that I come from is a world of poverty, people constantly struggling to make ends meet. Mothers are leaving the house at 5.00am to go the farm to make sure that her kids have at least one square meal. Fathers are going fishing and hunting to give his family a feast. Children are playing outside with no clothes on because their parents cannot afford to clothe them. Families are mourning almost every year because the lost a loved one to an indescribable disease .A ten year is old taking care of his younger siblings because his parents were victims of HIV/AIDS. Forcing him to become an adult when he is just a kid. For the first fifteen years of my life I lived in Nigeria, a country in Africa. I saw people languishing in pain not certain if they will make it till the next day. For example people who were homeless and lived on the street despite of the weather condition. Whenever I saw this it broke my heart. I felt sad because there were people who actually lived in conditions like that. Seeing those living conditions and the constant struggle made me stronger. It made me appreciate and be self-content with what I have. I learned to cherish whatever I had and not take things for granted. The experience also made me very determined and willing to go hard in whatever I do. I became driven to well in my academics in order to achieve my dream of becoming a nurse. I want to become a nurse so that I can help the less privileged, especially the people in Africa who have no one to turn to when the going gets tough. Knowing what I wanted my career to be right from childhood made me want to come to the United States of America. I felt that I was going to get a better education and more exposure in my field of study if I came to the United States. My motivation to reach my goal kept me from slacking off from my studies. Another inspiration that kept me from slacking off was my dad. My dad is a very hardworking man who can go to the extreme to get whatever he puts his mind to. He works so many hours in a day just to make sure that his family is comfortable and does not lack anything. That is his number one goal and he can do anything just to make it happen. He always tells me "to be my own person and not depend on anybody for anything". Those words inspire me everyday and keeps me from slacking off from my studies and my priority. Being around him and seeing how determined and hardworking he is makes me strive harder to achieve my goal in life. I know that I have to be independent young lady in order to be as successful as he is.
please tell me anything you see that is wrong whether grammar or whatever. thank you in advance.